[Naruto: triage]

[fahye_fic]

Title: Triage
Fandom: Naruto
Rating: PG-13
Wordcount: 7838
Notes: Ohgodfinally *collapses*. I started writing this quite a few weeks ago* as an idle experiment, because I love OT3s and I wanted to see what I could do with the Sasuke/Naruto/Sakura dynamic, but it turned out to be more fiddly and time-consuming than I would have liked. Also rather

Comments

[kick_flaw]

rant:

Oh thankyouthankyouthankyou for writing such a fantastic fic! It's rare to find such an excellent, IC take on NaruSasuSaku. From beginning to end, this was just fabulous.

I particularly enjoyed the use of Sakura's voice to tell the story, her practicality, her perseverance, her intelligence, all so subtly yet clearly depicted. Her sense of impending failure and her sympathy for Sasuke made my heart ache. Oh, if only she was written so well in general!

And they're all so painfully young here. You make their maturity in the ways of war and pain and death obvious (as in the opening scene), yet keep them confused and new in their pursuit of love. They bumble into what works realistically and wonderfully. Sasuke's sharp, rare smiles, Sakura's legs, Naruto's sudden, dramatic awakening to sexuality... I could go on and on

[fahye]

I figured that Sakura would be the least likely narrator to make me want to punch the screen in frustration :D Although I did have quite a few moments of wanting to give throw up my hands and yell GET IT TOGETHER, GUYS. It's true: for all that they're doing an adult job, they're still hopeless at sorting out emotion sometimes.

Thanks so much for the comment!

[suzu]

This is one of those fics where I feel like I need to squirrel it away on my computer somewhere against the chance that it might disappear from the internet some day, and I would die a little if it weren't available for re-reading. I love your characterization, and I think this is probably the best portrayal of Sakura that I've read, and I agree with kick_flaw in that focusing on Sasuke and Sakura was the right way to go. It really, really worked. I'm glad you didn't manage to work the porn in, too, because I think it would have lessened the punch of their emotions and thought processes. That said, I'd love to see something with these three in a physical relationship, partly because it'd be unspeakably hot, and partly because I'd love to see how they react and go about it.

In short: you've made my OT3 fangirl so very happy with this. ♥

[fahye]

If I feel like writing pointless porn at some stage in the future (I'm kind of dreadful at it in general, but sometimes I have moments) then I expect I'll pull these three out and see what I can do with them! But I'm glad you felt the lack-of-porn worked well here, so thank you!

[ryokophoenix]

*TACK NOTE*

ASLAKSJALSKJALSKAJSA I HAVE LIKE THIRTY SECONDS I'LL BE BACK LATER.

IN SHORT : <3 <3 <3

[fahye]

OKAY.

By '<3' you mean 'love' and not 'I am going to rip your heart out of your chest for writing SasuSaku', right?

[ryokophoenix]

IT'S NOT THAT I HATE THE PAIRING, it's that it doesn't make sense in my head, and I can't make it fit. I don't understand it - so if a fic is written that makes me understand it, everything is fine.

And darling, you wrote that fic. <3 I know this, you see, because you wrote this line:
Sasuke looks at her as though she's speaking another langauge but he doesn't care enough to translate. "Do you want me to be nice to you?"

And I thank you dearly. :D

(It helps that Naruto is mediating everything, admittedly :P)

Favourites:
Which is a loaded sentence if Sakura ever heard one, full of sharp meaningful words like us and home, and Kakashi's unique knack for turning his most important orders into casual assumptions.

--

Sakura drops her gaze from her teacher's face -- drops it a little further --

"Oh," she says, heart sinking.

--

to know that Sasuke wants Naruto and Naruto just wants, as wildly and stubbornly as he does everything else in his life

[askerian]

...oh.

You had me at the first paragraph, and then I kept going and going and "oh" at every clever turn of phrase, image, unexpected parallel. It's amazing. I kind of thought I would go back and quote the lines I liked, but there's got to be at least one per paragraph. I also love that you still took Sai's reactions into account, and the characterization of all of them is... oh, yes, I can see that so easily. Such lovely dynamics between the three of them.

It's a beautiful fic. Thank you for writing it.

[fahye]

Oh man, I came this close to just ignoring Sai so that I could finish the damn fic faster, but then...I felt guilty. Heh. I think I have a weakness for Sakura and Sai as ridiculous gal-pals.

Thank you so much for the comment, and the rec as well :)

[medusalethe]

Awesome. :)

[fahye]

Thank you!