Mercy Me - Chapter Seven | Love Is Not A Victory March

Oct 13, 2009 23:48


(This is a sequel to the story God Bless Catastrophe - we recommend you read that first.)

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luminous_vibe October 14 2009, 04:55:13 UTC
I love love love LOVE the use of the word "intimate" in this chapter. Right before Ashton thought of it as such I was thinking it's going to be such and intimate thing between them and then he thought it and it was perfection in a sentence. This sentence in fact: Ash couldn’t even fathom himself the level of intimacy he was asking for... Now I feel like a dork for going back and finding it...

Anyway, that whole idea of sharing your life's experiences with someone, all your memories and fears, in order to make them better... to make them come back to life in the way that Nao needs to... I love that he's so important to Ash that he would go through something like that for him.

I've said before that I'm excited about this pairing and I'm even more so after this chapter. I think it's going to be a good one and I think it's going to be good as far as the story goes and for Nao. I hope you guys know what I mean by all this because I'm having a hard time explaining it.

Also, I haven't forgotten Daichi being injured because of Hiroto's stupidity in lieu of Nao and Ashton (the cuteness!). So someone caught him following Hiroto and messed him up? Evil vampires! I hope he gets better or I'm gonna be really mad at Hiroto for getting him killed because he can't not be stupid for a few seconds!

So yes, there it is. Also, YAY for fast updates!

<3

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fae_dreamdance October 14 2009, 19:06:52 UTC
Don't feel like a dork. :D Unless we are supposed to feel like dorks for adoring that you went back and looked at all--that it was important enough for you to note. :D Thank you so much for that. :D

Might I say that I adore that icon? You use it often and It always makes me smile--the coloring is gorgeous. :D The person might add to it, but who knows? :P

We're excited for it too--nervous but excited. It seems like they are well received so that's a relief to us. We're glad you like Nao and Ash as pairing. :D It helps settle our fears. I get what you're saying--how it'll be not just good in the story, plot sense (in being given the chance to read it) but actually good for Nao himself. Its two-fold--and its exactly what we hoped would be seen. By more than just the two of us, that is. :D

Ahh!! You haven't forgotten. I love that:D HA!--evil vampires indeed. :D That don't sparkle and eat mountain goats. :P

Thank you so much for reading and commenting--we're SO SO SO happy that you did. :D It makes us smile and giggle like school girls. :D

-J

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