Comments | extraonions: FIC: Disentanglement Puzzle [Gen, PG-13, 550 words]

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FIC: Disentanglement Puzzle [Gen, PG-13, 550 words]

Oct 03, 2007 23:52

Title: Disentanglement Puzzle [Gen, 550 words]

Characters: Sarah Blake

Spoilers: Provenance

Rating/ Warnings: PG-13/ None

Summary: A missing scene from S1 episode, Provenance. Sarah Blake, in between finding the body and coming to the motel room. Written for

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pairing: sam/sarah, spn fic, rating: pg-13, oneshot, complete

Comments 10

bitter_crimson October 4 2007, 06:35:37 UTC

I liked this.

extraonions October 19 2007, 03:08:16 UTC

Thanks, hon! :) How goes it with the snakes?

sadelyrate October 4 2007, 08:31:04 UTC

This was a nice missing scene, and, I admit, something I've sort of longed for. Sarah was a great character, and it saddens me that they have mentioned her only once since Provenance...
You've certainly managed to capture well the reasons for her to be so drawn to Sam.

Job well done.

Thank you.

:)

extraonions October 19 2007, 03:09:09 UTC

Thank you so much! :) I really enjoyed Sarah's spunk, and of all the female guest stars, she's among my favorite-- and certainly one I would love to see again sometime.

girlfan1979 October 4 2007, 11:05:17 UTC

Nice piece of characterisation!

extraonions October 19 2007, 03:09:22 UTC

Thank you! *hugs*

fleshflutter November 20 2007, 15:29:22 UTC

Oooh this worked really well! :)

extraonions November 21 2007, 06:42:34 UTC

:) Thank you!

iamstealthyone November 20 2007, 16:57:02 UTC

Good missing scene. Sarah’s POV works well here as she tries to come to terms with not only what’s happened, but also how she feels about Sam.

Favorite lines:

She takes the coffee-cheap convenience store fare in a Styrofoam cup with paper handles-nothing like the decadent café latte macchiatos Sarah likes to treat herself to at her favorite bagel shop, or the imported German blend favored by her father.

I really like these details.

She takes a sip: burned asphalt across her tongue. It’s the best coffee she’s ever tasted.

Good description, and I like how, under the circumstances, the coffee tastes so good. Evelyn’s dead, but Sarah’s alive, and that counts for a lot.

or even his haunting (haunted) eyes

Nicely phrased.

Sam Winchester, mystery.

Sarah Blake has questions. It’s time she got a few answers of her own.

I like how you phrased this part, too.

extraonions November 21 2007, 06:43:54 UTC

Thanks so much... it's been my experience, when you're shocky over things happening, and grief, that little things tend to stick with you/ distract you.... so Sarah is noticing stuff like the coffee and the cop's watch....