(DAY 5: #55) STARBURST

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Title: Starburst
Pairing: Baekhyun/Chanyeol
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 3400w
Summary: As soon as he stepped off the train Chanyeol was in love.

Comments

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this was so beautifully written. it caught me from the beginning, with the description of the place in chanyeol's eyes when he was getting out of the train. i like how you kind of have different writing styles, and im guessing this one, which is apparently less frequent in you, must be quite hard to get. or maybe it's natural for you, i dont know, but either way, i think it worked really well this time. im going to be honest with you, i usually dont like fantasy. at least, not in fics. you must be one of the few, no, the only one who has made me like a fic in this genre so far. and this is not something i could have said before this fic. i like that you're working on writing this genre because you seem to genuinely like it, and i think you are able to make it work.

i like very much the beginning of this fic. i found chanyeol's character so likeable and it made me feel comfortable and warm. i liked very much the way you described the light art, and how it seemed as something ordinary, as in, a thing of this world, at the same time that its beauty was extraordinary. the story started as something with the felling of calm, daily life and i liked that. i liked and i imagined it as the beginning of a long novel that i would very much like to read. then when baekhyun appeared, i liked how he took a place in this beautiful scenery as if he was part of it, how his straightforward personality contrasted with the previous feeling but it was still so nice, and how it was different to chanyeol's awkwardness and shyness and they were both so charming. so in general i think i can say i liked the pace in this short story, and the way it was told from the perspective of chanyeol's thoughts which were very nice to read. i was surprised by the fantastic outcome, but in a good way because you manged to make it keep the feeling that had already taken place, so it only added to the beauty of it. i think i can say what i liked the most about the fantasy itself, was how it worked supplementarily to the feeling, the beauty, the romance and the story, working along with it and helping in portraying the characters, without taking a turn into something else completely. in other words, how it still felt natural. maybe i will still not prefer fantasy when i read fics, but that surely wont hold me from reading your fics, because i like how you write all of the different genres that you write.