RE: THIS IS MY PROMPT OMG MY PROMPTdkyngsooSeptember 22 2016, 16:57:19 UTC
i'm- i'm speechless idk what to say?
I'm a mess right now, tears are running down my face. I'm just sobbing. I'm serious. I'm shaking. This is just so so so beautiful. I honestly didn't expect anyone would claim this prompt. When I submitted it, it was just a silly idea I had because the mods were encouraging people to mix other AUs with domestic for an interesting mix. I just finished watching Lucky One and since I'm a sucker for MAMA!au/Pathcode!au, I thought, hey why not? I thought it was too ambitious, a prompt no one would take because it's too much work. I seriously didn't think... but here it is. This beautiful fic written from a silly idea I had that I thought of on a whim. I don't know what to say really but i'll try to because this deserves so much love. I don't think what i say will ever suffice but I'll try.
Let's start with how perfectly you've portrayed their perfect suburban family life. The way you wrote it, the way you showed how happy they are. The normal routine, the one that they've been living everyday for years. I loved how easy it was, how they just went about their morning, perfectly in-sync and perfectly content. I just loved how Jongin knew the little things about Kyungsoo, when he'd wake up, when he'd get the kids. The kids! They're just precious! I could feel how much love they have for each other, the breakfast scene was short but you were able to show what this fest was all about, a warm loving family life at home.
Maybe that's why when the static in their telly started showing messages, and Jongin was starting to freak out, and how Kyungsoo was rejecting the idea of it being true... my heart was breaking into pieces with each sentence. Because I could feel how scared Jongin was, of how much he loves his family that he wants to protect them. When he went home early and was busy researching and he forgot to pick up the kids, that part really got me because I understand how he forgot, how chaotic everything was for him inside his head that he forgot Dosik and Jongshik. And I could feel the guilt and confusion he must have felt, and how it affected Kyungsoo and the kids too.
Because Kyungsoo... Kyungsoo is just obviously afraid, he was denying the truth, what he knows in his heart, what he's been dreaming, what he's been seeing. He was ignoring everything and trying his best. He would rather accuse Jongin of being crazy, he would rather fight with Jongin than admit the truth because he was afraid to lose this life. The perfect life he has with these three people he loves so much. And I think that made it all the more emotional for me, that they both love each other so much, they both love their family so much, that they're doing their best to protect it the way they can. Jongin by finding out the truth, and Kyungsoo by trying to restore it back to normal.
I'm not crying again I swear. I just love how you portrayed their family life, the dynamics between them four, the way they bounce off each other, the conversations, how Jongin and Kyungsoo flirts after all these years!!! It's just normal family life facing a problem that they're trying to solve. Yeah this problem involves mysterious static messages on the telly and their laptops but the way they're approaching it isn't anything dramatic, they still love each other and talk to each other. I just really really love this aspect of the fic so much. Such domestic fluff filled with overflowing love.
And then you give me the plot and the mystery and I'm here just glued to the screen, amazed. I could tell you put obvious thoughts into crafting everything beneath the domestic!au because everything was done perfectly. The subtle changes, Jongin's normal jog with the dogs, the office workers, their neighbors out and about. The little details you've put of the way their "normal" was changing effectively creeped me out, while at the same time setting the pace and moving the plot forward. The more Jongin notices, the more desperate he becomes to find out the truth. When Baekhyun's call came I was so scared for him, and when he told Kyungsoo and he just teleported, and Kyungsoo cut his arm with a knife I was feeling all sorts of emotions I was just wow wow wow woooooow.
RE: THIS IS MY PROMPT OMG MY PROMPTdkyngsooSeptember 22 2016, 16:57:28 UTC
AND WHEN YOU HAD DOSIK TURN ON THEM WITH RED EYES OMG I WAS SCREAMING. I just checked my prompt after reading and I saw I put that either one of them can die, or one of their kids... I honestly forgot this part. So when you had Doshik, their little boy, against them... I was equal parts heartbroken and amazed by the turn of events. I knew it couldn't be too easy to escape. And then that knife scene I was crying so hard omg. Jongin. Poor Jongin. I just, when Doshik's eyes turned brown and he was saying it's alright I was bowling my eyes out. And when Kyungsoo was waking him up and the guilt that Jongin felt after..... I just. I have no words. Even when Jongshik asked them and they said he was in a special sleep, I was crying again and it was just. I hate you so much you beautiful soul.
But if I have to choose my favorite part, favorite dialogue, out of everything, it would have to be this:
"...I don't care how fabricated my life has been up to this point, and I’m sorry that you’ve lost people Baekhyun but do you want to know something? The way I felt my heart break when I had to leave Kyungsoo behind- that was real, and my whole life I never want to feel that way again, so I’m going back.”
Perfect. Just bravo. I cried here. I had to stand up and give myself a moment because I actually had something similar written with kaisoo but it's non au. And this is just the perfect way to describe the whole situation. That even though everything was fake, the marriage, the life they had, the memories... what isn't fake is the feelings they have for each other. You can act out anything, you can live a lie, but what he felt in those moments, those strong emotions of attachment and love, those are real. And I loved that Jongin said it here.
I love that this has so many elements to it, the corporation interfering with superhumans to use them as weapons of war, the experiments, the controlled environment, Baekhyun breaking everyone out of their control cities (a clever nod to Monster), the experiments they've lost, needing to rescue yixing before they can revive Doshik, the conspiracy, the incoming coup from the experiments, Kyungsoo as a teacher who can effectively homeschool their kids in the safehouse... I just love this so much. There are so many things you included in this one action-packed mystery-ripe fic and the best part is how all through out it, it never lost that sense of domesticity, that feeling of family love that kept them all going.
I don't really know what else to say because I think I already said too much even though I think no enough words can express my love for this fic. Thank you so much for writing this. It's such a great fic. I couldn't have asked for a better fic interpretation of my prompt. Your writing really carried the plot, from the building of their home life to the gradual progression to the darkness underlying their seemingly perfect life. You had me in your world and your story. Impressive!
When you post this to your own account, I hope to spread this more to other people so they can enjoy it too. Because this is a fic meant to be treasured and reread over and over. Thank you so much, from the bottom of my heart, for giving me a fic full of Kaisoo love. It really is so easy to imagine them here, so in love and perfect together.
I'm a mess right now, tears are running down my face. I'm just sobbing. I'm serious. I'm shaking. This is just so so so beautiful. I honestly didn't expect anyone would claim this prompt. When I submitted it, it was just a silly idea I had because the mods were encouraging people to mix other AUs with domestic for an interesting mix. I just finished watching Lucky One and since I'm a sucker for MAMA!au/Pathcode!au, I thought, hey why not? I thought it was too ambitious, a prompt no one would take because it's too much work. I seriously didn't think... but here it is. This beautiful fic written from a silly idea I had that I thought of on a whim. I don't know what to say really but i'll try to because this deserves so much love. I don't think what i say will ever suffice but I'll try.
Let's start with how perfectly you've portrayed their perfect suburban family life. The way you wrote it, the way you showed how happy they are. The normal routine, the one that they've been living everyday for years. I loved how easy it was, how they just went about their morning, perfectly in-sync and perfectly content. I just loved how Jongin knew the little things about Kyungsoo, when he'd wake up, when he'd get the kids. The kids! They're just precious! I could feel how much love they have for each other, the breakfast scene was short but you were able to show what this fest was all about, a warm loving family life at home.
Maybe that's why when the static in their telly started showing messages, and Jongin was starting to freak out, and how Kyungsoo was rejecting the idea of it being true... my heart was breaking into pieces with each sentence. Because I could feel how scared Jongin was, of how much he loves his family that he wants to protect them. When he went home early and was busy researching and he forgot to pick up the kids, that part really got me because I understand how he forgot, how chaotic everything was for him inside his head that he forgot Dosik and Jongshik. And I could feel the guilt and confusion he must have felt, and how it affected Kyungsoo and the kids too.
Because Kyungsoo... Kyungsoo is just obviously afraid, he was denying the truth, what he knows in his heart, what he's been dreaming, what he's been seeing. He was ignoring everything and trying his best. He would rather accuse Jongin of being crazy, he would rather fight with Jongin than admit the truth because he was afraid to lose this life. The perfect life he has with these three people he loves so much. And I think that made it all the more emotional for me, that they both love each other so much, they both love their family so much, that they're doing their best to protect it the way they can. Jongin by finding out the truth, and Kyungsoo by trying to restore it back to normal.
I'm not crying again I swear. I just love how you portrayed their family life, the dynamics between them four, the way they bounce off each other, the conversations, how Jongin and Kyungsoo flirts after all these years!!! It's just normal family life facing a problem that they're trying to solve. Yeah this problem involves mysterious static messages on the telly and their laptops but the way they're approaching it isn't anything dramatic, they still love each other and talk to each other. I just really really love this aspect of the fic so much. Such domestic fluff filled with overflowing love.
And then you give me the plot and the mystery and I'm here just glued to the screen, amazed. I could tell you put obvious thoughts into crafting everything beneath the domestic!au because everything was done perfectly. The subtle changes, Jongin's normal jog with the dogs, the office workers, their neighbors out and about. The little details you've put of the way their "normal" was changing effectively creeped me out, while at the same time setting the pace and moving the plot forward. The more Jongin notices, the more desperate he becomes to find out the truth. When Baekhyun's call came I was so scared for him, and when he told Kyungsoo and he just teleported, and Kyungsoo cut his arm with a knife I was feeling all sorts of emotions I was just wow wow wow woooooow.
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But if I have to choose my favorite part, favorite dialogue, out of everything, it would have to be this:
"...I don't care how fabricated my life has been up to this point, and I’m sorry that you’ve lost people Baekhyun but do you want to know something? The way I felt my heart break when I had to leave Kyungsoo behind- that was real, and my whole life I never want to feel that way again, so I’m going back.”
Perfect. Just bravo. I cried here. I had to stand up and give myself a moment because I actually had something similar written with kaisoo but it's non au. And this is just the perfect way to describe the whole situation. That even though everything was fake, the marriage, the life they had, the memories... what isn't fake is the feelings they have for each other. You can act out anything, you can live a lie, but what he felt in those moments, those strong emotions of attachment and love, those are real. And I loved that Jongin said it here.
I love that this has so many elements to it, the corporation interfering with superhumans to use them as weapons of war, the experiments, the controlled environment, Baekhyun breaking everyone out of their control cities (a clever nod to Monster), the experiments they've lost, needing to rescue yixing before they can revive Doshik, the conspiracy, the incoming coup from the experiments, Kyungsoo as a teacher who can effectively homeschool their kids in the safehouse... I just love this so much. There are so many things you included in this one action-packed mystery-ripe fic and the best part is how all through out it, it never lost that sense of domesticity, that feeling of family love that kept them all going.
I don't really know what else to say because I think I already said too much even though I think no enough words can express my love for this fic. Thank you so much for writing this. It's such a great fic. I couldn't have asked for a better fic interpretation of my prompt. Your writing really carried the plot, from the building of their home life to the gradual progression to the darkness underlying their seemingly perfect life. You had me in your world and your story. Impressive!
When you post this to your own account, I hope to spread this more to other people so they can enjoy it too. Because this is a fic meant to be treasured and reread over and over. Thank you so much, from the bottom of my heart, for giving me a fic full of Kaisoo love. It really is so easy to imagine them here, so in love and perfect together.
Thank you thank you ❤
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