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476: We Get New Cells

Apr 19, 2009 15:31

"We Get New Cells ( Read more... )

kate horowitz

Comments 18

zigsternenstaub April 19 2009, 19:51:39 UTC

Some interesting imagery, but the execution is too tangential.

mspixieears April 23 2009, 05:20:38 UTC

I well agree. This doesn't seem finished at all.

zigsternenstaub April 23 2009, 19:45:48 UTC

It seems like little bits of different poems stuck together.

mspixieears April 27 2009, 02:03:00 UTC

Yeah, that's a fair comment. Wonder where it's from?

Thread 14

killahdillah April 19 2009, 21:55:49 UTC

Wow that last stanza just comes out of nowhere it's so powerful. I like the imagery and I think the whole thing really works.

tulips_and_lace April 19 2009, 22:13:42 UTC

I love the idea. I feel like the last part could've been taken a little further? Like it could have been amazing but instead it was just, good.

operatingroom April 20 2009, 02:02:48 UTC

I love the idea of this.

insane_duckfish April 20 2009, 10:28:38 UTC

As someone with a food allergy (albeit not even close to that bad), these lines made me smile:

...She was
re-testing her food allergies, sneaking
peanut butter cups past her immune system on a Saturday night.