They are definitely stupid sods. And ahhh, I'm glad you liked the supporting characters too. I find too many excuses for me to write the Game of Thrones
I could relate extremely well to Sean's feelings in the first part- wanting so desperately to be given reason to hope, and hope against all odds only to fall, again (so very much like Tracie- watching her almost broke my heart), and to be left with nothing but rage that you don't know whom to direct at: yourself, the other person, the world... I loved the shift of perspective to Viggo who is taken so completely by surprise by Sean's decision and so overwhelmed that it takes him two weeks until he finally goes to see Ariadna (wonderful summary of their relationship: They kept their work and their personal lives separate, because Viggo was fond of her-and he was with Sean.) who, by the way, is stunning, she already seems to know that it won't last and has the courage to let him in anyway
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I loved the shift of perspective to Viggo who is taken so completely by surprise by Sean's decision and so overwhelmed that it takes him two weeks until he finally goes to see Ariadna
Goddamn. You notice all the little details that I put here and there and you fit them all together and all I'm left is o wave my hands and flap around in great joy. It sounds vain, but I am so happy you picked out the bit about him dismantling his phone, because that image just caught me and refuses to let go until I had write it out. /clings to.
The whole situation- the biggest loser is Ariadna really, because her feelings for Viggo are genuine. It's utterly not at all fair to her, and I'm just flailing here that you noticed that- that it isn't fair, that even though she might count as an interloper in the relationship you still care about what happens to her.
I love your feedback. /CLINGS HARD. Thank you so, so much for this, Noa. ♥
Oh, but you make it very easy to feel for Ariadna! I'm in complete awe of her strength and courage- to dare to let him in (into her home, her heart) in a state like that, when it is crystal clear that he is not nearly over his last relationship that has lasted so many years. And yet, she open her arms wide and jumps despite the fact that she is going to fall and that Viggo won't be there then to pick up the pieces but nevertheless she helps him mend what there is to meant of his heart with Sean not around. This gesture is so beautiful and so sad, and to me it shows so much insight into the mechanisms of life in general and love in particular- you can only win if you dare to open your heart to someone, and maybe you'll discover that you can fly, maybe you'll discover that you can't, but it always is worth trying because- and this is what fascinates me about her (the way I read her in your fic)- you can win so much more than you can loose (if the person you're offering you heart to is chosen wisely). She seems to know that she won't do
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You're making a lot of sense! And yeah, that's what grips me so hard about her too. It's twice now that I've made her lose Viggo to Sean after she had him for a while, and it just strikes me how strong she is - the way I write her, that is - that she's capable of letting him in. Better to regret what you do than what you didn't do. Like Tracie said: Ya can come in wi' me right now and satisfy yer curiosity, or ya can go home and spend the rest of yer lifetime regrettin' it. It's a hell of a risk and she doesn't have much of a chance, but- if she doesn't, it's a regret she'll have that she can't ever take back.
(Also, this makes me think about the differences between FPF and RPF again - that there's just so much depth to be delved into for RPF, because in all honesty I'm writing about real people with their own motivations. In FPF, I can dismiss Ariadna's presence as a plot device and never thought about her so deeply. These characters are characters, but because they are based upon real people, there's this necessity for greater
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It seems like Viggo is blurring his own thoughts by interweaving them automatically with what he is feeling - and what he should be feeling, whereas Sean, strangely, doesn’t think at all, just feels, at the moment itself, only to then, afterwards, come out with a quite clear and quite level-headed conclusion. Love how this makes them so different (and how this is both perfect characterization for them individually and as a couple).
AGAIN, HOW DO YOU DO THIS, I DIDN'T EVEN REALISE I WAS DOING THIS. I have nothng else to say except those caps because I'm staring wide-eyed at how easily you put things into words, holy shit.
I love how disjointed this all is, how fitting it is that you cut this scene in half and messed with the chronology because this IS fucked up and like this, it feels like that, too. I actually still have no idea why I chopped everything up like this and messed up the chronology, honestly. I think I was subconsciously going for some sort of effect when Viggo or Sean are thinking back to the situation and that part
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Amazing writing as ever.
Need to dash - have to get my fix - need to find out. MORE MORE MORE …
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I loved the shift of perspective to Viggo who is taken so completely by surprise by Sean's decision and so overwhelmed that it takes him two weeks until he finally goes to see Ariadna (wonderful summary of their relationship: They kept their work and their personal lives separate, because Viggo was fond of her-and he was with Sean.) who, by the way, is stunning, she already seems to know that it won't last and has the courage to let him in anyway ( ... )
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Goddamn. You notice all the little details that I put here and there and you fit them all together and all I'm left is o wave my hands and flap around in great joy. It sounds vain, but I am so happy you picked out the bit about him dismantling his phone, because that image just caught me and refuses to let go until I had write it out. /clings to.
The whole situation- the biggest loser is Ariadna really, because her feelings for Viggo are genuine. It's utterly not at all fair to her, and I'm just flailing here that you noticed that- that it isn't fair, that even though she might count as an interloper in the relationship you still care about what happens to her.
I love your feedback. /CLINGS HARD. Thank you so, so much for this, Noa. ♥
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(Also, this makes me think about the differences between FPF and RPF again - that there's just so much depth to be delved into for RPF, because in all honesty I'm writing about real people with their own motivations. In FPF, I can dismiss Ariadna's presence as a plot device and never thought about her so deeply. These characters are characters, but because they are based upon real people, there's this necessity for greater ( ... )
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AGAIN, HOW DO YOU DO THIS, I DIDN'T EVEN REALISE I WAS DOING THIS. I have nothng else to say except those caps because I'm staring wide-eyed at how easily you put things into words, holy shit.
I love how disjointed this all is, how fitting it is that you cut this scene in half and messed with the chronology because this IS fucked up and like this, it feels like that, too. I actually still have no idea why I chopped everything up like this and messed up the chronology, honestly. I think I was subconsciously going for some sort of effect when Viggo or Sean are thinking back to the situation and that part ( ... )
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