Comments | ever_obsessed: Fic: Balancing Act (River/Jayne)

ever_obsessed

Fic: Balancing Act (River/Jayne)

Jan 06, 2007 20:33

Title: Balancing Act
Series Title: Hat Trick (1/3)
Author: Missy, aka
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Comments 10

deep_salt_water January 7 2007, 03:03:53 UTC

I really enjoyed that. You write Jayne quite well, especially his confusion and anger. And his irritation at not being irritated!

ever_obsessed January 7 2007, 18:17:41 UTC

Felt like a Jayne thing, him being upset at the fact that he wasn't upset anymore, *g*

Thanks, lovely.

lattelady6 January 7 2007, 17:20:03 UTC

I loved the way River confused Jayne and the little things we learned about her during their cocnversation. You write them very well.

ever_obsessed January 8 2007, 02:50:19 UTC

Many thanks for the love, *g*

I hope you'll be around for the next two parts.

ceslas January 11 2007, 06:11:39 UTC

“Your mother’s dances are clumsy but her center of gravity is sure,”

I like the complete confidence this inspired in me as to River's perception of Ma Cobb, if that makes sense. I felt the imagery and was able to match it to the Ma we saw in the letter to Jayne in The Message.

Really liked your take on River, and enjoyed the visual of her with her foot so delicately balanced against Jayne's forehead. Interesting and believable.

ever_obsessed January 12 2007, 06:03:59 UTC

I seriously love Ma Cobb, based much just on what we know about her. I've never pictured the Tams as being very on-hands parents even if they had a big place in society, and I see Ma Cobb as being the opposite, very there for her children, even if she doesn't agree with them or their opinions.

The entire fic actually came from me coming up with that line in the middle of the night and deciding to see where it could go, *g*

Thanks so much for the feedback.

angel932 January 29 2007, 00:15:35 UTC

Lovely! I'm so looking forward to part 3!

ever_obsessed January 29 2007, 01:54:32 UTC

Thank you!

open_embrace September 15 2007, 01:20:59 UTC

AAAHHHH!!!!

Now, I am not a River/Jayne shipper, but that was just awesome :) I really enjoyed it.

I've never had the guts to try writing Jossverse, but seeing you pull it off so well... You got the characters so spot on. I kept expecting Jayne to try and peek up her skirt though...

*scurries off to read the other parts*

ever_obsessed September 15 2007, 01:52:20 UTC

I've never had the guts to try writing Jossverse

Hee, a friend of mine said the same thing, she says the dialogue's the scariest - but then, dialogues's always scary for me, it's my weak spot - but I finally managed to get her writing and now she's writing one of the best Wash/Zoe fics I've ever had the pleasure and honor to read, it's just beautiful.

Thanks! =)