Lie to Me Fic: though the strands fall from her ponytail (1/1)

Sep 03, 2010 16:31

Title: though the strands fall from her ponytail
Cal/Gillian, 2x20 Exposed missing scene, angst, pg

Words: 710

Author’s Notes: Thank you to my beta, tempertemper77 for looking over this so quickly and for catching the silly mistakes my tired mind let slip! This is set during Exposed between the second-to-last and last scenes.

“I’m fine,” she finally says, but knows her voice is quiet and her words don’t quite ring true. )

creative: writing, pairing: you were protecting me?, tv: human lie detectors

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vivrebarefoot September 3 2010, 15:57:06 UTC
Sooooooooo sweet. I love the simplicity of the story. It's powerful because it rings so true. *happy sigh*

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etoilefilante September 3 2010, 16:49:42 UTC
Thank you so much! I'm happy it rings true for you. :)

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spyglass_ September 3 2010, 16:18:46 UTC
Oh, this is so quiet and lovely. I really like that. I do so enjoy reading your missing scenes and how they fill in the gaps of the episodes themselves. And I really love the contrast from the tone of this piece and the tone of the actual episode, if that makes sense.

ALSO, I am quite pleased to see you back and writing again. This is just me being selfish ;)

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etoilefilante September 3 2010, 16:53:28 UTC
You know how much I respect your opinion so I'm thrilled you like this. I just felt there was such a gaping hole between Gillian realising she'd never see Burns again and Gillian all smiles at the table... there needed to be another scene or two there. This was mostly inspired by her line in this week's episode, though, about how if you don't talk about things then you can pretend they never happened.

Hee. Thank you, your comment made me smile :) I think there's a fic or two of yours that I need to catch up on!

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spyglass_ September 3 2010, 19:36:15 UTC
I just felt there was such a gaping hole between Gillian realising she'd never see Burns again and Gillian all smiles at the table... there needed to be another scene or two there.

Yeahhh, that's what I was getting at by commenting on the contrasting tones. The episode itself was pretty dark and violent, and this is so gentle and intimate. It's a nice transition that would explain Gillian being all smiles the next morning, IMO.

Hahaha. I've been writing A LOT. I may have started yet another plot!fic that I will have to share with you. AU post-S1, inspired by a quote from The Girl with the Dragon Tattoo. I'm outlining it right now, but I have a brain trust in place and I may need to enlist you for one or two opinions at some point.

OH ALSO. You have seen this video, right? It is my GO TO happymaking video, and I couldn't find the link for it for a LONG time. I just stuck it in my rec list (which I've temporarily made f-locked until I'm sure I've rid myself of the pingback bot) so that I could always find it again ;)

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etoilefilante September 3 2010, 19:43:02 UTC
Aha, tired tired mind didn't clock that. Thank you, I'm glad you agree!

THIS IS EXCITING NEWS. Now one question - AU post-S1 Mentalist, or are you branching out into LTM?! Either way, I can't wait to hear all about it and of course I'll help in any way I can!

I can't see it! It says This video contains content from WMG, who has blocked it in your country on copyright grounds.! What is it? Good thing sticking it in your rec list so you can find it, though - I've been having fun updating mine today!

Also, wtf is this pingback thing all about? I go away for a few days and suddenly there's something evil going on that I don't understand.

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livlovlaugh September 3 2010, 16:53:14 UTC
Lovely story. Your writing seems effortless, quite a feat! And your Cal and Gillian are so in character. Great job! :)

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etoilefilante September 4 2010, 13:09:33 UTC
What wonderful compliments, thank you so much. I'm really happy you liked this :)

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devilz_haircut September 3 2010, 17:11:54 UTC
Aww... this fic gives a great sense of comfort <3
For some reason I feel like it's winter night behind window glass. Hehe, it's quite often that the combination of hot coffee & your writing gives me this feeling! Well done, luv :)

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etoilefilante September 4 2010, 13:11:32 UTC
It's funny you should say that because I was feeling decidedly autumnal when I wrote this. The days are getting shorter and the wind's picking up... but the sun's still shining at times. I'm thrilled you found this to be a comfort, thank you. :)

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devilz_haircut September 4 2010, 18:50:53 UTC
You're lucky! It has been pouring rain for 3 days here, so I'm jealous of a proper autumnal feel you're getting LOL I guess that confused my senses.

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baby8love September 3 2010, 18:52:54 UTC
gawd. awesome. sighs.

first of all, the story is fantabulous. so sweet. and there's something uber-hot about him pulling her hair up into a ponytail. uber. hot.

secondly, "airplanes" by b.o.b. is one of my favourite songs of all time. <3

lastly, you are awesome. that is all.

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etoilefilante September 4 2010, 13:15:35 UTC
You are awesome for leaving me such lovely comments! There's definitely something hot about a guy fixing your ponytail. I'm so glad you liked this. :)

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