FIC: Carrefour (CO-WRITTEN WITH DAYLILYMOON <3)

[etherati]

Title: Carrefour
Fandom: Watchmen
Characters/Pairings: Walter, Dan peripherally, Z!Walter/Dan also peripherally.
Date Written: 2009
Summary: A young Walter gets stranded in New Orleans in the late 1860's. Every bizarre sequence of events has a beginning.
Rating/Warnings: R for violence.
Notes: First, there was a Zombie AU. Then, there was daylilymoon 's

Comments

[tuff_ghost]

You guys I don't even know what to pick out of this, I love everything. It was an exciting story and a terrifically fun ride, first off. I loved "dog of the streets" and the dog skull burned with lye and the feeling of the time he spent dreaming in the mud underwater. At all points of the story, the atmosphere comes through so thick and strong, the sense of being overwhelmed comes from the rich imagery as well as Walter's experience of being held down and trapped. Both of you have done an amazing job of creating a sense of a strange, hostile, cloying and incomprehensible place. It's odd actually, it works out as an analogue to Rorschach's vision of NYC. The sense of atmosphere and the filter of his perception are just as powerful.

I love the sly, clever, careful closing bookend which seems to shout out to me that THIS IS ONLY CHAPTER ONE. Maybe that is my favourite part.

[etherati]

Dawww *hugs*

The atmosphere was something we were trying really hard to nail down - very humid and heavy and overwhelming, and I'm glad that worked ok. And the dreaming in the river bit was one of my favorite parts.

YES I hope that this is only chapter one. Well, Still would have been chapter one. but regardless heh.

[daylilymoon]

Thank you Tuff! ♥♥

That is a really cool point about this New Orleans being just as hostile and strange to him as NYC is to canon Ror--never even thought about that.

[i_am_your_spy]

Oh this is awesome. Beautiful and poetic and creepy as hell.

[etherati]

Thank you so much, those are definitely the combination of things we were aiming for. :D

[daylilymoon]

Thank you very much! :D

[radishface]

So much of the language is so beautiful here, especially "strawberry moon." (my favorite. Can I take one home, please?)

The atmosphere comes through very thick and muddy and appropriate-- definitely gave me the shivers the first read through. I'll have to go back and read it again to completely understand the timing and placement of events and Ror himself.

It's a beautiful title, as well.

[etherati]

'strawberry moon' is actually not ours; in the old farmer's almanacs, each month's full moon had its own name, and June's is 'strawberry'. :D

The title actually has some specific meaning beyond just its literal translation, but you kind of have to dig for it; a lot of the little details in this are fleeting but important to understand what's going on, one of those 'blink and you miss it' things, so a second read is probably going to turn up new stuff haha.

[daylilymoon]

Thank you, thank you ♥ I'm glad you liked it!

[jeppa]

Aaaah! This is amazing!

some of my favourite lines:

All he finds there is a rock worn smooth by centuries of sleeping beneath the river.

Walter walks on as the water dries from his back, away toward a place where the sun bleaches the sky pale and warms even the coldest stone, where a man's aloneness can be absolute but, he knows somehow, all the more bearable for it.

I don't know what else to say. This is fucking EPIC.

[daylilymoon]

Awww, thanks so much! It's so nice to know you liked it. :D

[etherati]

Thank you so much! The riverstone has some pretty special significance so I'm attached to that line too. :D

[unimagine]

YAY DEMONIC RITUALS. 8D

Oh god, zombie cowboys. That was beyond amazing. You guys make such a great team! My head is still reeling. I'm going to have to read it again, but I love the mood and creepiness and Walter's disconnected dreams in the river.

Will there be more? I will give you cake. x3

PS. Captcha says "beriberi Philadelphia". I think it's psychic.

[etherati]

Thanks so much! When daylily wrote the first zombie cowboy fic I was just like *jawdrop* because I had never imagined such a thing and it was so, so wonderful.

Then this happened. D:

And there will probably be more ohgod.

[daylilymoon]

Aaw thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it :)