Harry/Luna Story

[eternalkess]

Finally, after months of saying I was going to, I have gotten to the library and can now post my fics. This entry is the H/L one, and it's a one-shot. It's called "To Live on the Moon", and it's named after a good bit of a song I think fits it (quoted only at the beginning - it's not a songfic). This fic is unbeta-ed, but I have posted at the "

Comments

[heron_advocate]

Eeeee....this fic. I'm just...I'm wowed. Please tell me you're planning to continue? Marvelous. I wish I could write...well, you know. Like this. The whole dream sequence was just amazing. Good job. :)

Some things:

He knew she was trying too - knew it was his fault for breaking up with her in the first place, but what could he have done?

You mean "to" instead of "too." :)

...he knew about Gordric Gryffindor’s sword, but he probably wouldn’t if he weren’t a Gryffindor.

You spelled Godric wrong, that's all! :D

[ladyknyght]

Hello there. :-) This is a great beginning of a story. You're gonna write more chapters right? But, I liked your characterization of Harry at the beginning. The dream portion was lovely and very Luna. :-)

I liked that you kept in character. Hermione might have taken over of the conversation, because that's what she does. But, how you had her was fine. Ron, was being Ron where Luna is concerned. You showed Ginny in her true colors.

Question: Wasn't Mrs. Weasley in the kitchen when they were talking about Ginny riping Gabriel's dress? Or was she too busy to hear? That was only thought.

Are you gonna write more? Have you started reworking "Back to Good" yet?

[eternalkess]

Oops - I didn't realise the bit about Mrs. Weasley. I'll have to edit that. Thanks for pointing it out. About the ICness, thank you for the compliment. That's one part I really try to focus on, so it's good to know I got it right.

As for continuing this story, I'm not sure. I'm working on a new original story, plus I'm reworking my N/G story, and this one was orgiginally meant to be a one-shot. But I've gotten quite a few requests to continue it, so I may do that. As for Back to Good, I have started rewriting it. It's taking longer than I thought, and it's really going to change the story. I don't know how long it will take me, but I'll let you know when I'm done (and, if your offer to beta still stands, I'd love to have someone look it over before I post it).

Thanks for the comment, and if I get through my current writing projects I may continue this one.

[ladyknyght]

Yesm, my offer to beta stands. Anything I can do to help, just ask. :-)

Happy writing on all your projects. I really look forward to reading them.