[FIC] Set Fire to the Rain [Rated: PG-13ish]

[felonytexas]

I posted this a few days ago in the oldfriends community. So I guess this is a cross post.

This is my first X Men fic, ever. Though I've had a long lived obsession with X Men (and as a child was convinced that Magneto and Professor X really were just suffering a really intense lover's quarrell...X Men First Class confirmed this). Anyway. Hello.

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[moonlettuce]

I've added an author tag for you :)

[felonytexas]

Thank you!

[pipertheharper]

yayay this was fantastic! well done! i can't wait to see where you will go with this!

[felonytexas]

It is actually finished. I might write another XMen fic, but this particular piece is done. I was going to write it as a grandiose excuse for smut...but...when it came time to write about the sex it felt wrong to ruin the sincerity and simplicity of the moment by using words like 'cock' and 'fuck'. So this piece is done. But I hope to write more (perhaps with actual sex)!

[pipertheharper]

understandable, it is a lovely story. i look forward to your next writing endeavor :D

[teapotcrumpet]

GUHHH THE ENDING! SO HOT SO HOT! Love the image of the two playing cards on the dingy hotel bed and sharing a glass of alcohol. Delicious.
And OMG @ Charles swooning and Erik catching him. <3 one of my favorite parts of the fic.
Just found a few errors (sorry, it's the copy editor in me, hope you don't mind!):
"easily moving the smaller man who’s balance" 'who's' should be 'whose'
"The word wasn’t said allowed" 'allowed' should be 'aloud'
"There was a belt to tug lose" 'lose' should be 'loose'

I really enjoyed your writing style, very well done. Please continue writing! These two really bring out inspiration, don't they? :)))) Look forward to reading more from you!

[felonytexas]

Thank you for the help! I can not edit my own work for the life of me (I'm dyslexic and always see everything I've written as I wanted it to be written rather then how it actually is... and Grammar not my strongest point).

[papercutperfect]

Aw wow! This was so awesome! Loved the part with them playing cards on the bed <3

Mmm, shirt-ripping.

The last paragraph was especially intense. You have their 'voices' down perfectly, especially Erik's.

Great job, really hope to see more!

[felonytexas]

Their voices were the part I was the most concerned with when writing, to ensure I had Erik and Charles down, how they would think, how they would react and speak to one another. I'm glad other people think I got it!

[rimestar]

Damn, this is.. shockingly hot. I love how you've characterized Erik- it's fantastic. I love this part:

"The thought of Charles stalking around in his mind, observing and witnessing thoughts never meant to be viewed by another made Erik feel ill. His stomach knotted against its self, and if he had had any sense he would have stepped away from the smaller man and vomited in the toilet, washing it off as the empty mistakes of drinking."

For someone so private to be so implicitly intimate... damn. This is good.

[felonytexas]

You're just trying to flatter me!

itisworking.