Caught up with the story now :) I'm becoming fond of it as well, now that I have a better understanding of the characters, their personal history and their interests. I enjoy the humour and the pretty elves, and the conflict around young Lindir and his innocence, unwanted and at the same time very attractive. For now, in my head, I'm treating chapter 1 and 2 as a prologue. They had a very different feeling and now seem more of a background than elements of the story's present. But we'll see. I'm enoying following how you tell the story.
Oh, and the snow in the pic is just wishful thinking. It's been a degree or two above zero for many days and there's hardly any snow, just ice, ice everywhere, and often with water on top. Bleh!
This pic is for some splendid winter dawns with mist and fiery skies we had before ferocious wind and rain set in. No ice yet. Wet compost though :|
Thank you for your comments, and about getting to like the story and seeing how I tell it :)
I love the way you offer your experience of the first two chapters here.
(I have thought this too and the same elsewhere in it. I have wondered in an enjoyable curious way with what plot the story could be tighter and more coherent. Cut and give up sub-stories, I reckon but it would need something added too.)
Playing with writing makes me admire and be fascinated to see how other people do stories.
As for enjoying wondering how the story could be tighter and more coherent, at this point I'd say 'start from chapter 3 and keep only a paragraph or two from the first chapters :P But, I'm sure as the story develops, these two chapters will find their place.
Sub-stories interest and fascinate me, as I tend to be very straightforward and linear in telling my stories and seldom have things going on or secondary characters that don't lead towards the main direction of the story. I admire and enjoy sub-stories :)
You know what? Your stories stay with me visually as incredibly clear pictures of both the landscapes or backdrop and of the characters as they interact. I think it is because of that linear telling - as the reader I am there with them in the moment. It's a brilliant thing to do. Lots to wonder about - what is going to happen next - and it's more edge of the seat like that and it keeps unfolding as you read.
Sub-plots are very annoying because as a reader you spend the whole story waiting for things to join up!
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For now, in my head, I'm treating chapter 1 and 2 as a prologue. They had a very different feeling and now seem more of a background than elements of the story's present. But we'll see. I'm enoying following how you tell the story.
Oh, and the snow in the pic is just wishful thinking. It's been a degree or two above zero for many days and there's hardly any snow, just ice, ice everywhere, and often with water on top. Bleh!
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This pic is for some splendid winter dawns with mist and fiery skies we had before ferocious wind and rain set in. No ice yet. Wet compost though :|
Thank you for your comments, and about getting to like the story and seeing how I tell it :)
I love the way you offer your experience of the first two chapters here.
(I have thought this too and the same elsewhere in it. I have wondered in an enjoyable curious way with what plot the story could be tighter and more coherent. Cut and give up sub-stories, I reckon but it would need something added too.)
Playing with writing makes me admire and be fascinated to see how other people do stories.
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As for enjoying wondering how the story could be tighter and more coherent, at this point I'd say 'start from chapter 3 and keep only a paragraph or two from the first chapters :P
But, I'm sure as the story develops, these two chapters will find their place.
Sub-stories interest and fascinate me, as I tend to be very straightforward and linear in telling my stories and seldom have things going on or secondary characters that don't lead towards the main direction of the story. I admire and enjoy sub-stories :)
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You know what? Your stories stay with me visually as incredibly clear pictures of both the landscapes or backdrop and of the characters as they interact. I think it is because of that linear telling - as the reader I am there with them in the moment. It's a brilliant thing to do. Lots to wonder about - what is going to happen next - and it's more edge of the seat like that and it keeps unfolding as you read.
Sub-plots are very annoying because as a reader you spend the whole story waiting for things to join up!
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