Childhood by Voracity (PG13)

[chibifukurou]

Title: Childhood
Fandom: NCIS/BTVS
Pairing: Gen
Categories: AU, Crossover, Family, Friendship, Kids,
Length: Super-Epic (164,000)
Warnings: Stalkers, Serious Injury

Author on LJ: n/a
Website: Voracity's Fanfiction

Summary: What if Willow did an oopsy with her magic and turned Xander into a toddler; then when Dawn was watching him wished Xander could have

Comments

[anonymous]

Dont forget to mention the annoying habit the writer has of repeating information at the reader of events that have happened or was talked about in their story

why this rec

[anikiro]

Sorry, I don't understand why to rec this story at all. I kept skipping parts because like anonymous said it is repeating, and the characterization is not on spot at all, they are all (BtVS and NCIS) really out of character.

Re: why this rec

[chibifukurou]

I agree that at the beginning of the story the characters' personalities are taken a notch or two beyond what would normally would be considered acceptable. I felt that this was understandable and acceptable given the 'cracky' nature of the story's beginning. I felt that they settled down to more normal levels as the fic went on.

As a reader I personally didn't mind the repetitive nature of Voracities writing style. I've read a good number of her fics and have enjoyed them all. I'm sorry that you find it distracting and annoying.

While I understand your points, I don't feel comfortable taking the rec down right now.I will try to make my rec more clearly represent the fic. This might not happen until my lunch break because I have to go to work now. Thank you for the feedback and I will try to keep a closer eye on the writing style used in the stories I rec so that I can give better warnings.

Re: why this rec

[anikiro]

Thank you for your reply. There are all kind of readers there, i find repeats distracting and you not, okay. I don't think i would have said anything if it was just that, but you said in your review: "The characterization of the NCIS team in particular is spot on" which is not the case. I don't mind if characters behaving out of character, if i am in that particular mood, but i expected them be in character, so i was disappointed.

Re: why this rec

[chibifukurou]

I've fixed the rec so that will hopefully better represent the fic. Thank you so much for your feedback and I'm sorry that my rec led you to expect something different than you got.

[anonymous]

I have read other stories by this author and enjoyed them. I don't think I would have reced this one. It feels unpolished. Good ideas, needs a beta to sort out confusing paragraphs. It feels rushed.