Love seeing angry!Much, guilty!Will and Djaq trying to convince the outlaws of her plan. You've done a great job with Allan, too--he recognizes his weaknesses, he's guilty and remorseful, AND wants to help Robin.
Why Robin was fighting so hard to keep the man alive was a concept he could not grasp. He could understand the fate of what would befall the town if the sheriff died. But not that it was funny or anything, but the people could be taken out of the town. You couldn’t harm anyone if there was no one there to harm. Why Robin did not see this as a solution was puzzling to Allan.
Allan and the rest of us are pretty much on the same page regarding the flimsy excuse the writers came up with to keep the sheriff alive!
Just one editorial note, if I may: I think you need a break of some kind between these two paragraphs But the others wouldn’t let him stay. That he could see now, in all of their eyes. He felt so pitiful, a creature hardly worth living, the guilt tearing away at him. He could never forgive himself, not for what he had done. Yet the time to tear himself apart would come later. Robin would live…even if it was the last thing he would do.
He had never seen Much so angry before. The simple fact worried him. If Much was this upset over something Will had not been able to control, what would the man do to him if he ever found out about Allan’s betrayal? Surely he couldn’t be too upset; after all it was his betrayal that would help them all out in the end. Still the guilt ate away at him. What would he say when they pressed him?
I had to go back and re-read 'cos initially I missed the transition from Will's thoughts to Allan's. 'Course, that may just be me.
Why Robin was fighting so hard to keep the man alive was a concept he could not grasp. He could understand the fate of what would befall the town if the sheriff died. But not that it was funny or anything, but the people could be taken out of the town. You couldn’t harm anyone if there was no one there to harm. Why Robin did not see this as a solution was puzzling to Allan.
Allan and the rest of us are pretty much on the same page regarding the flimsy excuse the writers came up with to keep the sheriff alive!
Just one editorial note, if I may: I think you need a break of some kind between these two paragraphs
But the others wouldn’t let him stay. That he could see now, in all of their eyes. He felt so pitiful, a creature hardly worth living, the guilt tearing away at him. He could never forgive himself, not for what he had done. Yet the time to tear himself apart would come later. Robin would live…even if it was the last thing he would do.
He had never seen Much so angry before. The simple fact worried him. If Much was this upset over something Will had not been able to control, what would the man do to him if he ever found out about Allan’s betrayal? Surely he couldn’t be too upset; after all it was his betrayal that would help them all out in the end. Still the guilt ate away at him. What would he say when they pressed him?
I had to go back and re-read 'cos initially I missed the transition from Will's thoughts to Allan's. 'Course, that may just be me.
Great read! Thanks for sharing.
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