Comments | emiliglia: Of Distant Dark Places (Kirk/McCoy, Spock/Uhura PG-13)

emiliglia

Of Distant Dark Places (Kirk/McCoy, Spock/Uhura PG-13)

Jan 27, 2010 11:51

Title: Of Distant Dark Places
Rating: PG-13
Pairing: Kirk/McCoy, Spock/Uhura
Word Count: 1,000
Warnings: second-person POV, angst
Summary: For st_respect's Ship Wars, prompt #2: ain't no sunshine when she's gone.

Author's Note: POV was left intentionally vague. I'm curious to see at the end who you thought it was and then I dare you to reread and switch ( Read more... )

ship wars, fanfic, star trek reboot

Comments 27

siluria January 27 2010, 17:39:11 UTC

I actually really like how you kept it vague, and I have to admit to flicking between one character and the other as I read it the first time. I started with Bones' pov, but there was a line that would make me think it was Jim's, and then it would flick back. I've read it three times, and it works however you read it! :) Do you know whose pov it is??? :)

emiliglia January 31 2010, 19:19:20 UTC

Thanks, hun! It flicks back and forth when I read it, too. I don't really have a set character in mind but, because I like to play with conventions, I tend to prefer it from Jim's POV. ;)

siluria January 31 2010, 21:21:17 UTC

The "Glad you noticed" line so very Bones that I can easily see it as Jim's :)

emiliglia January 31 2010, 22:54:22 UTC

Yeah I can see Bones saying that more than Jim but I suppose an adjective with how it was said would be all it would take to clearly make it one over the other.

katmarajade January 27 2010, 17:55:05 UTC

This is great-- I really like the ambiguity of the narrator. It really could go both ways. I lean towards thinking it's Bones, but that's just me. I also like the parallel of Spock/Uhura here. This is some lovely angst, but I liked that they got their happy ending!

emiliglia January 31 2010, 19:20:04 UTC

Thanks so much! Playing with Spock/Uhura as a parallel was fun because the movie was all up in that shit. :P

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emiliglia January 31 2010, 19:20:48 UTC

I think it's more powerful from Jim's POV for some reason. Maybe because it's written more with Bones being the one left behind on edge? Thanks so much!

disturbinglynic January 27 2010, 18:49:52 UTC

i was under the impression when i first read it that it was bones' pov. but you dared. so i read it as jim's. and it blew me away as his.

emiliglia February 1 2010, 14:43:50 UTC

I think it's stronger from Jim's POV for some reason, but even each time I read it it switches, so no one's set in stone. :) Thanks for reading!

the_dala January 27 2010, 19:11:01 UTC

I totally missed the ambiguity the first time around, heh - it just didn't occur to me that it wasn't Bones. Reading it from Jim's POV was stunning.

emiliglia February 1 2010, 14:45:08 UTC

It's stronger from Jim's POV IMO but even when I read it, it's a different POV each time. :P Thank you!