Fic: It's Always Open Season On Princesses Part 13
Title: It's Always Open Season On Princesses Part 13
Spoilers: Through Season 2
Word Count: 3528
Rating: R
Disclaimer: Dan Harmon STILL owns it.
AN: Thank you guys for reading this! I am so happy to see the response this story has been getting from people. Well, this chapter starts what I would call the second act of this story. They’re both in the ( Read more... )
Spoilers: Through Season 2
Word Count: 3528
Rating: R
Disclaimer: Dan Harmon STILL owns it.
AN: Thank you guys for reading this! I am so happy to see the response this story has been getting from people. Well, this chapter starts what I would call the second act of this story. They’re both in the ( Read more... )
No. This isn't a reward for a job well done. It's an object lesson.
Take a good long look at this cake. Except it's not cake. It's a representation of the tension you packed into this chapter. Notice how neatly cut it is. That's how thick it was. Like it would take half a gallon to wash it down it's so thick.
This is a long winded way of me saying good job with the tension and micro-tension. Those are the two secret keys to writing great fiction. And especially in this chapter, you made micro-tension your bitch.
Also it's gratifying to see Jeff's reaction to that Sergio creep and that he can see right through him. Though his pasta terrifies me. If it can knock Jeff out of jealous/angry mode with just a taste... it's probably laced with lsd or something.
Well I can't think of anything nice to say without actually being nice so in parting. You also made characterization your bitch in this chapter too. Spot on all around.
Good night.
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You gave me chocolate and then said nice things, so I think a little bit....YOU'RE my bitch.
See ya around.
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That's what you should have gotten out of that review.
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Okay, pumpkin. Whatever you say. I liked you better when you were kissing my ass. Has that ship just completely sailed now?
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Okay if you say it like that it sounds obnoxious and ridiculous. You seem to also be missing the fact that I'm pointing out Sergio as a probably drug dealer. That's the only way for his spaghetti to be that good.
And I've never ass kissed. Brown nosed? Maybe. Suck up? Very possibly. Boot licked? Only once. But never ass kissed. I have my standards.
And don't get all excited. Just cause I'm stand offish in this review doesn't mean I might not think of something nice to say in another. We'll just see how it goes missy.
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I'm pretty much going to pretend that you said nothing to me after that cake metaphor and then maybe by the next time I post something (or you post something) I will have forgotten what a huge jerk off you're being. Is this just because Peter Falk died? It's okay if you need to talk about it.
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And if any of us should be offended it should be me. Here I gave you delicious cake and nice words to boot, and you accuse me of being a jerk? How does that work? Do you treat all your reviewers like this? Or just the ones that go out of their way to put extra effort in their comments? I shudder to think of how you would have reacted if I gave you pie.
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Great chapter btw.
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