Fic: The Forsaken (Charles/Eloise)

[elliotsmelliot]

Title: The Forsaken (5/6)
Characters: Charles/Eloise, Richard, Daniel, Ben, Sawyer, Juliet, Penny, Desmond
Disclaimer: Lost is not mine. Seriously? Seriously.
Rating: PG13
Words: 8000
Spoilers: Up to The Incident
Summary: It starts and ends with a prophecy, but there’s really nothing divine about the mess Charles and Eloise made over the course of

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[elliotsmelliot]

Ahhhhhhhhh, in return. Your comment is so epic! It is the type of comment that makes all this worthwhile. Thank you for being so considerate and crazy and loving with your feedback.

I would think Richard had a plan of his own.

Maybe. To be honest I really did not think about what his agenda could be. I just needed something/someone to explain Eloise's mind changing about how to raise Daniel in The Variable. I could see Richard having some tenderness toward seeing a young man killed, but if I had to answer, I think he just wants to know more about time travel.

I really struggled with understanding why Eloise would send Daniel on quick path to death. To me her Plan A was safer, but I've presented her as very risky all along. So even though I see it being more plausible to read her actions as either having given up on the possibility of course correction or perhaps even using Daniel, I needed to give her more humanity here. I am not good at writing bad ass characters. I always make them a least a little good.

I love how you always bother to explain things that are completely unexplained in canon.

This is really my raison d'etre for writing fic. I liked to try to give context. Maybe it is the historian in me, I want to know more.

I'm being reminded of that time when he was the one in the cage.... oooooh!

OMG! Great catch! When I wrote about Charles as the POW with Dharma and his thinking about tigers, I totally knew I wanted to later have him visit the zoo off island and see Daniel years later. You have a great memory. Just knowing you connected this made my day!

Anyway, I cannot really express what it means to see you have left feedback for me, especially in a series, and especially with this one which was inspired by your prompt. I admire your writing, ideas, and spirit so much that just knowing you read is like cashing a pay cheque.