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elliotsmelliot

Luau Fic for Falafel and Kayim.

Jul 19, 2008 12:39

Title: Slam!
Character: Boone, Shannon, Charlie, Hurley, Sawyer
Rating: PG 13
Words: 1400
Warning: Set sometime around Solitary.
Summary: My apologies for its lateness. This fic is for Queen falafel_musings who wanted the S1 ensemble. It won Best Humour Fic in September 2008 and Feel Good Fic of the Year in Best Damn Fic of 2008 at lost_fic_awards.

( “You know, making a list, checking it twice.” )

fic: humour, fic: gen

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elliotsmelliot July 19 2008, 18:31:41 UTC

because I'm such a desperate need for squee that it's not even funny.

Hopefully when you are Queen, we can all make it up to you and provide you with squeeloads of squee.

I'm glad you liked this and enjoyed the contrasts. Thanks so much for reading.

tellshannon815 July 19 2008, 17:29:38 UTC

Nikki and Paulo not being meant to procreate made me laugh out loud!
Loved the idea of this, especially Boone and Shannon. Kind of ironic that ethan saw Michael as unecessary in the grand scheme of things, since quite a lot of later plots i.e. the raft, leading to the encounter with the tailies, to Shannon's death and later Ana and Libby's, and so on, arose because of some action by Michael. (That's no way intended as a criticism of your fic, if anything it's of Ethan's foresight!)

elliotsmelliot July 19 2008, 18:35:48 UTC

I completely agree with you on Michael being useful. I figured Ethan was just being worried Michael might interfere with whatever plans they had for Walt. Thanks so much for reading and commenting!

janie_tangerine July 19 2008, 17:50:33 UTC

Oh, Boone, you aren't on that idiotic Ethan's list because you are on MY list! ♥

*cough* sorry. Back on track. I had to get that out. Ah, Ethan, you're as insensitive as the writers are, but hey, this was so brilliant I can't even say. I burst out laughing every three lines or so!

The bantering here was perfect. Each of the five of them was just so perfect, I wanted to clap hands or something. And Ethan has got a nice sense of humor I must say, apart from that.

“Why would you think I wrote that?”

“Um…cause you like Jack?”

Okay, if Lenina squees for the Sawyer/Kate can I squee at this? Yes? It's not like he denied it after ;)

LOL at Shannon's hips. I was totally cracking up at her reaction!

“Who the hell are Nikki and Paulo?” Sawyer and Shannon ask at the same time.

“Probably fertile but they shouldn’t procreate,”And there I cracked up for three minutes or so. Sawyer and Shannon saying that sentences at the same time is just too good for words and fertile but shouldn't procreate? *cracks up again* Now I can get behind Ethan. ( ... )

elliotsmelliot July 19 2008, 18:43:15 UTC

I love your icon! Poor polar bear. He didn't make the list either!

Thanks to you, Boone's crush on Jack is totally part of my personal canon now and must be reveled in. I totally agree with Ethan - Nikki and Paulo shouldn't procreate. Of course Ethan would know Sayid couldn't be brainwashed into Other's society, though his whole future partnership with Ben makes that ironic. I'm glad you liked the ending! I originally had them just be bitchy at each other and that didn't work. It seems I made the right choice.

falafel_musings July 19 2008, 18:21:47 UTC

Welcome back to the Luau, Ell! I'm perfectly delighted with this fic, I must say. It's not too crack, since the character voices are so perfect, but it was ticklishly funny.

I love that you brought back two of the relationships I miss the most - Shannon/Boone and Hurley/Charlie. These pairings are so nostalgic now, but both of them always bring a smile to my face. These characters brought Lost down to a human level which was so quirky and fun. I also love that you added Sawyer to the mix, because - oh man - I used to enjoy Sawyer and his surly obnoxious charisma so much in the early days.

There are so many little characterisation touches that I loved. I had a great mental image of a scrappy!Charlie and a sheepish!Hurley coming to question Boone over the list. Boone's lonely little remark about Vincent being on the list made me want to laugh/cry. I loved Hurley thinking the list is cursed. Shannon ran away with all the best lines.

“God, they’re sooo annoying.”

“Who?”

“Everyone.” How I miss the Snark Princess! I love how she ( ... )

elliotsmelliot July 19 2008, 18:50:27 UTC

The show could definitely use Shannon's snark and refusal to go along with the majority. By now she would be the sole voice of reason.

I'm glad my Queen was pleased. It still feels a bit rushed but I wanted to get it down before I lost it. Originally it was going to be Ethan's letter to Ben, but that version turned out too boring. That's twice now, if you're keeping track, that I've weaseled out of your Ethan prompt but not actually writing him.

falafel_musings July 19 2008, 19:06:18 UTC

Originally it was going to be Ethan's letter to Ben, but that version turned out too boring. That's twice now, if you're keeping track, that I've weaseled out of your Ethan prompt but not actually writing him.

Heh! I didn't notice that. But I think you're right that this version is much more entertaining. You still get a strong vibe of Ethan through the list itself. I'm interested in seeing you write Ethan and Richard as creepy BFFs.

elliotsmelliot July 19 2008, 20:32:25 UTC

I still have a lot of blanks on the Richard story. That will be a long time coming I suspect.

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elliotsmelliot July 19 2008, 18:51:00 UTC

Aw thanks! I'm so glad you liked it.