Fic: Her Smile

[the_girl_20]

Title: Her Smile
Rating: R
Word count: 1,119
Disclaimer: The characters do not belong to me.
Summary: Something unsettling happens to Jordan at the hospital
Notes: This has been lying around for a while in some form or another. I played around a little with it and was encouraged to post it ;)

Comments

[lettersandsodas]

I already commented, but I've read it multiple times and found something new to like about it each time. So, I'm going to comment again. :)

It led to sexual tension. Jordan saw no point in sexual tension when there could be sex instead.

That is the best character summary for Jordan ever. So perfect.

But if she went around smiling at everybody she’d ever slept with, she’d have crows feet like the Grand Canyon for chrissakes.

MADE OF WIN!!!

And I love the Elliot characterization, so no need to be self-conscious about that. It's really good.

Now, about that boiler room scene... :)

[the_girl_20]

Awwww, you're spoiling me with these comments. Seriously though, I'm really flattered that you like this little fic and I will do my utmost to see if I can come up with what happened in the boiler room for you.

*is resolved*

[purplesyringes]

For. The. Win.

This was so sweet, and I love Jordan's reluctance to smile and ends up doing it anyway. X) It's adorable.

Boiler room scene, please! :D

[the_girl_20]

*blushes*

Glad you liked it. I'm definitely going to see what I can do about the Boiler room thing as people seem keen to see it.

Wonder why...

[ohmanhattan]

I've got to comment on this when I'm supposed to be studying for the GRE. It's way way way awesome.

Another Elliot/Jordan author is always welcome! Thanks for posting. If this is only the tip of the iceberg of your talent, then iceberg ho, my lady.

A genuine smile that started as an uncontrollable tugging at the sides of her mouth and then travelled all the way up to her eyes, crinkling the corners so badly that she’d have to schedule a few extra shots of botox to correct the damage done.

This is a really nice touch.

Jordan saw no point in sexual tension when there could be sex instead.

Aaand thus ends my quest for a mantra.

I love how Elliot is both submissive YET dominant in this. This is why I love the idea of them so much. They form this total WTF dichotomy, and yet it works. It really works.

[the_girl_20]

I don't have a clue what the GRE is, but good luck with it anyway!

I'm so glad you enjoyed the fic. I was very nervous before posting it due to the immense talent demonstrated by the authors in the group already. So I was kind of hiding behind my chair as I pressed submit. So to get lovely comments like yours is a great relief.

I love how Elliot is both submissive YET dominant in this. - I kind of wanted to get that across. Because I love how Elliot is on the show and I think she can be both at times.

Thanks again for taking the time to comment.

[ohmanhattan]

Also, yes, a boiler room scene. Much anticipated.

[the_girl_20]

There probably will be one at some point. You're not the only one who's curious as to what they got up to there.