THE REAL LJ IDOL SEASON 8 WEEK 21 -- Intersection: Bridge

[ellakite]

Comments

[ecosopher]

Liked how you switched the ending around - it works well.

It's a great story. I really felt empathy for Robert and am glad the future's looking bright.

[ellakite]

A fellow competitor suggested the revised ending. I'd like to thank them publicly, but I'm not sure of the proper etiquette for doing something like that... ;)

Yeah, Robert is easy to sympathize with. He's a nice guy, though a little clueless sometimes. Then again, aren't we all?

Thanks for the feedback!

[ecosopher]

She'd probably just blush profusely and get all embarrassed that you took her critique to heart

[ellakite]

I'm not usually one for gossip, but the anecdote you mention is interesting. The poor guy's ex-wife defines the word "tramp". OTOH, you hear plenty of stories of married men sleeping around, sometimes siring children with several women... and the wives of these men are utterly clueless.

And people wonder why I've never married.

PS: I'm going to take your suggestion to heart, and not publicly identify the person who helped me revise my piece this week... But I will tell them once again that I appreciate their efforts.

[ecosopher]

Oh, I don't think any gender has the monopoly on doing the dirty (it's just we have more words to describe it when it's women who do it... but that's part and parcel of the culture :) and is a whole other topic!)

I've never married either ;p Living in sin is far more fun!

PS. You know, those people who offer to critique your work almost always make the effort to stop by and read the final submission, anyway, so I'm sure they're aware and would offer to do it again at any time.

[n3m3sis42]

Aw, man. That is heartbreaking.

[ecosopher]

RIGHT?! His children weren't little either - I think the oldest was at least in his mid-teens. :(