Sundered Faith, Part 4 (2/?)

May 18, 2011 12:36

This story keeps expanding as I write and at the rate it's going, it'll get close to being as long as the NaNo. Sigh ( Read more... )

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elfhawk June 28 2011, 14:10:43 UTC
That is the problem with reading it in the works. I've got another 4 or 5k that refuses to link together, and I've rewritten a couple scenes a good three or four times trying to get it to work. Thus the art break, because I was just irritating myself by the end of it. (Maybe I should just skip it and leave Tae as narrator until they get to the jail and see them. Except that wouldn't work because common sense says get the hell out of dodge when angry people want words with you... Bleh, I don't even know.)

It's not really Tae and Odette. Odette was a bonus- sorcery is really rare because users tend to fry their minds out really early on. As for why they want Tae, kindly recall it's been mentioned that the Protector's main symbols are a sword and a sun. (Possibly the sword hasn't been mentioned. I should double check. But really, definitely mentioned the sun a couple times. Way back in part one, where Tae bitched about some people thinking that all sun gods were facets of the same sun god. (That may or may not be viewed as a hint.))

The Jadens needed a Hekatonkheir because that's how the empire got built last time and needed a conduit. The Isadors needed the Jadens to use a Hekatonkheir to get Crunch to get Tae. It kinda goes both ways there. Either party could have come up with the idea to use it, but the Isadors were the ones who came up with *how* to use it. (Berserkers are kinda rare and they probably went through a few before finding one that didn't go frothing insane at the connection, and Crunch would've been easy to hire for a nonexistent job and then teleported to where they wanted him. Though there were probably broken bones involved on their part when Crunch noticed something wasn't right.)

The name is stolen from there, yes, but they're not those monsters, just noncorporeal earth spirits. (Of course, that's like saying a whale is a small fish that lives in the sea.)

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jachyra June 28 2011, 17:04:35 UTC
Alright. Connections are clicking, bulbs are flashing behind my eyes now. I get it now.

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elfhawk June 28 2011, 19:39:30 UTC
I try to go back and make certain the information is there. But since I already *know* the information, I sometimes forget the reader doesn't have a cheat sheet to keep track of things. Thus me needing feedback for where more clues would be helpful. (Of course, there's also the fact this is probably only half of part 4, so there's going to be some unanswered questions.)

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