On Editing

[elfhawk]

So I've got 50000 words of text I need to proofread. I took December off because by the end of NaNoWriMo, I basically had the entire thing memorized and couldn't see typos because I knew what the sentence was supposed to say. Carmen happily helped out with a lot of the grammar stuff that I would've spotted during the proofreading, so I changed my

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Re: second read-through

[elfhawk]

I've always seen catacombs as one of those 'always plural' words, like pants. How about I swap 'its' out with 'the' and just ignore ownership of the vaults?

Regular-like. I like it.

But the third assumed is a totally different use of the word! Argh. Changing the second one. The first is too 'ass-u-me' for me to want to take it out, and the third is precisely the word I want there.

He's gotten claustrophobic. The walls are in there with him. Put on someone else's glasses and look at the walls. Are they the walls of the room or walls in the room? I know the way they cave in on me, they're in the room with me because I know the room is really bigger than what it feels like.

Tae is apparently a pirate.

Everyone everywhere complains about Telubra. It takes up a majority of the continent and the few travelers still using it instead of the southern roads surface at their destinations short guardsmen because the Telubrin commanders aren't keeping a good grip on their soldiers. The girls mention later they were turned back away from the Telubrin border because it's unsafe. So basically, it's like me complaining to you about boating around Somalia because they've got pirates and are murderers. You don't need to have been there to know the worst of what's going on.

Doubled collapsed isn't a problem there. Repetition does have its purposes.

Edric's a nice boy, but the Khorevail people are mostly a bunch of politicos. Consider him being a Catholic from Rome and given assignment in Prague. Sure, it's a nice place to visit, but Rome's where you need to be to get noticed. He's far too bookish for them to want to promote to any rank of authority, so he got assigned someplace more in keeping with his skills.
He also dislikes being away from his sister.
Also, I may have him running around being peregrine now. He was fun and the girls left an impression. (Helios Osgar will be needing help, considering the influx he's going to be getting soon...)

Changed to Athena asking "shouldn't you be busy" and Tae telling Petra to be careful. Sigh.

Troll outreach program. Bwahaha. (Now I see troll panhandlers chilling out on a corner with "Homeless, will work for food" signs.)