TDIR: Loyalty (5)

[edenbound]

Fandom: The Dark Is Rising
Main characters: Will, Bran, OMC (sort of), Jane, Barney, Simon, John
Referenced characters: Arthur, Gwion
Pairings: None
Contains: N/a
Rating: G
Summary: Six must be gathered again, to face the old threat wearing a new face.
Index: Index.

Comments

[edenbound]

I remember. :)

Thank you for saying so. This is one of my favourite stories to work on, and the one that flows easiest at the moment. I don't often write longer stuff, so it's also stretching my writing muscles a bit. :D

I think I do have a little trouble with the ages -- mainly because I don't recall them being pinned down hard enough in canon. xD I think the "studying for medicine" bit comes from my mum being a doctor and saying "when I was studying for medicine...". I hadn't really thought about Simon's age before, either. I think originally I meant to make it sound as if he's seventeen-nearly-eighteen, and being a geek (in the best way possible) and reading up in advance. Which doesn't quite work with the idea of it being in summer, unless his birthday is in the summer. :/ I might go through the previous chapters and fix it up a bit, because it deserves cleaning up and clarifying -- if I can do it without bending things too much, anyway. xD If I can make it sound like he's doing his A Levels, that would make more sense, I think.

I don't think it's necessary, but I like it -- possibly because I've spent time with family who don't notice when they're doing it and it just sort of clicks as normal, for me. I'm glad to know I haven't put too much in, though: I certainly want to avoid that.

I'm going to see whether I can find and listen to that song now -- thank you! :)

[flyingskull]

It was my unalloyed pleasure.

I think Simon doing his A level and having decided on a career would work perfectly. It doesn't matter that their ages are vague, they are teens and this is why they sound like their younger selves and - at times - like old people. It's period of huge transformation in one's body and mind and this sort of double-vision is very realistic and endearing to readers. :-D

As for the Welsh, it didn't bother me a bit, I was just carrying on our old discussion. The way you use it is perfectly good.

If I had any at making sound files I's send it to you, but alas, I'm still a CD sort of person. Sorry.

[flyingskull]

Urgle. Typing and eating a sandwich at work do not mix well.

I meant *A levels; *It's a period; *If I had any skill at

Sorry about that.

[edenbound]

That's alright -- I've noticed some slips in the previous chapters of this and I have no clue how they got through, so I'm hardly one to talk. xD

Although now I come to be replying on this page, I find the font is ridiculously faint and I'm pretty sure I've made mistakes I can't see because of it. :p Maybe that's just my screen brightness, though. D:

[edenbound]

I'm glad that's working well, too. I'd been wondering a bit if I was doing it right because I'd aged them up quite a lot compared to how they grow throughout the books -- so obviously they would have changed, and yet I didn't want them to be unrecognisable.

It's good to hear, still. I wouldn't want to throw anyone out of the story for my quirks -- I mean, a certain amount of it is reader preference, but still.

That's alright. :) It might be on iTunes or something. Or if not I'm sure there's somewhere -- this is ze interwebs, after all. :p