Johnny's Orphanage series

[e_eliza_d26]

Johnny's orphanage

The Beginning…

Author: me.

Genre: fluff, a bit of angst and romance.

Character: KAT-TUN,NEWESandARASHI.

Pairing: RyoDa, main, others.

Beta : rin_chan267

Rating: PG.

Disclaimer: I own no one.

Summary: what happing when a new kid comes.

A/N: this is my FIRST fic ever all the Johnnies in this fic are chibis BUT they are the same as to what

Comments

Re: you like it XD *so happy*

[sharmidev]

I don’t know if these are on purpose because they are kids and probably talk funny and maybe thats what you are trying to do but I shall just point it out anyways k?
.... this is hard to show when i don't know how to make the mistake more obvious.... here is the basic mistakes
lat=let jest=just gat=got kike=kick ...(the things in () are the stuff i thought might need fixing.)

Auome-san then an evil smirk (grew)on her calm face,
Ryo learn how to (treat) people better he should be the one to (share) his space

Sho in a (sarcastic) tone.

and I just thought you (finally) (dissuaded??) to look as pathetic as you truly are" uttered Nino.

When they (reached) the window

he (have) pimples, a (runny) nose

when the kid (ran) crying

his legs had moved on (their) own running

Johnny (shook) his head hopping for the best.

It (has) been three hours and you (just came. I )am sure

the ally(. 'I )am the worse' thought Ryo

You calling out princess how can (that) be me

who (took) it happily

At (the) orphanage(,) all the kids have been waiting for Ryo and the new kid, Johnny (had) left already right after leaving everything to Auome-san who by now is starting (to) panic.

i hope this was helpfully if anything is confusing please ask. and i am looking forward to more of your story! =)