Eavesdropping Is Hard on the Heart by hannahcarrietta

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Title: Eavesdropping Is Hard on the Heart
Author: hannahcarrietta
Pairings: House/Chase
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 3,440
Author's Notes: I do not own House MD or have any claims on it if I did there would be a lot more slash and it would be called the House love Chase show. I am not writing this story for any type of profit. Please do not sue me as I am a poor

Comments

[nareshkendel]

OK, I should tell you that MPREG is not my thing, but I decided to give it a chance. Sadly, I still can't stand it.
So, I'll just comment about the writing and not the plot, ok? I can't say much about the grammar, since english is not my first language, but I detect a serious hate towards commas.

"I said that if you were to come with me and told me that you were pregnant that I would not be angry for long at the very least even if you had gotten pregnant deliberately which I could never see you doing and very happy if it was accidental as you are the only person in the world that I have ever loved enough to want kids with."

This is the longest sentence ever. Maybe you'll like to add a pair of commas, or a semi-colon.
Other than that, is not so bad. I just hope this comment won't offend you. :)

[avonassac]

Personally, I thought this was one of the best MPREG fics I've ever read and I really feel sorry for you that you couldn't appreciate just how wonderful it was.

Rather than picking on others regarding their long sentences (which, if you actually followed the show and shipped the good ship, you would totally understand the depth that sentence took), perhaps you should invest your time in something worthwhile, such as getting a nice usericon, or perhaps removing a few sticks from your ass.

I'm feeling a "serious hate" towards you and from further detection, I say.. STFU.

Hope this doesn't offend you :)

[nareshkendel]

Woah! I did't say the fic was bad, or did I? *re-reads her post* Nop, I didn't. I just said that maybe a pair of commas here and there would make it easier to read.
btw, I love this usericon. Steve McQueen is the best.

[avonassac]

*re-reads my comment*

STFU

*types angrily some more* Your icon looks like a.. don't even get me started.

But yes, STFU

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[favyan]

I agree, Steve is the best. However! That? Is not Steve McQueen. That is some ugly-ass, bloated, Japanotard looking piece of crap kangaroo. Even if it's features even remotely resembled a rat, STEVE IS GREY. Last time I checked, brown wasn't grey.

[gandolforf]

What are you talking about? You can't just let a person's imagination make them happy, can you? Maybe in her mind, Steve was brown. You don't need to go off on someone because of that. Her icon wasn't hurting you. She was expressing love, and you're radiating hate. Please GTFO.

[favyan]

There's imagination and then there's just plain dillusional.

[hannahcarrietta]

Thank you for liking the story and defending my story. I am glad that you enjoyed it.

[hannahcarrietta]

I am sorry that you did not enjoy the work but if you can't stand MPREG then you shouldn't read it... I like the sentence how it is so I think I will keep it as it is as I do not see any places for them :)