WIP | Of Family Resemblances and Like Kinds | 1/12

[duck_or_rabbit]

Title: Of Family Resemblances and Like Kinds
Part: 1
Part Summary: Regulus was in danger of losing his reason, which would only make things more difficult than they already were.
Part Rating: PG13
Part Characters: The Black Family :: Walburga, Regulus, and mentions of Sirius, 1978.
WIP Pairings: Yes, but this is not Blackcest.
Part Warnings:

Comments

[sciathan_file]

I have read it and I love your fantastic characterization of Regulus. Everything in here is so detailed and imagistic - the smoking under the sidewalk, Regulus always trying to feel his own heartbeat. You've captured so much of his complexity in relation to Sirius

[duck_or_rabbit]

THANK YOU for the in-depth review! You're a doll! Oh, please be my beta because I am writing in the dark without the light from another writer/reader to guide my path

[sciathan_file]

Yeah, I'd love to Beta for you, if you want. :)

On animal allusions - you have to be really, really deft to pull them off without them being thudding and cliched (I'm not that deft at all, so I avoid them like the plague). I would cut them out and steer off the more poetic language, because your straight up description trounces your metaphoric language without need of poetic decoration.

But your characterizations are so intricate and fleshed out.

I forgot to say you should post this somewhere (I would recommend genfic_hogwarts or sirius_centric if you haven't already), as you could probably pick up a fairly strong readership.

^_^

[duck_or_rabbit]

Yeah, I'd love to Beta for you, if you want. :)

Thanks, hon! *hugs* I'm working on chapter 2 and will send you something next week, if ok. I'll take full advantage of your pre-grad school time because things will get crazy for you soon, to be sure.

But your characterizations are so intricate and fleshed out.

Thanks for the compliment on characterization. Making the characters as true as possible is the most fun part of writing for me!

You mention two great places to post! The fic isn't anywhere but on my LJ, and I'd like to reveal it at a few other sites, hoping others can enjoy it!

You're awesome!

<3 <3

[sciathan_file]

Send whatever you want me to look at to sciathan.file@gmail.com.

^_^