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Fireball by akite

Oct 17, 2007 19:03

Title: Fireball
Author: akite
Prompt: 132 Meteorite may hold secret to life outside earth
Pairing: F/K
Rating: NC-17
Length: Approximately 1300 words
Notes: Thanks to llassah kick starting me in the right direction and mergatrude for beta reading. Any screw-ups you see are all mine.

( Fireball )

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Comments 18

hurry_sundown October 18 2007, 00:40:17 UTC

Aces! This is a lovely slice-of-life, although I did keep waiting for the aliens to show up.

akite October 18 2007, 01:07:45 UTC

Hee! No, no aliens in this story. Glad you like it.

zabira October 18 2007, 01:16:01 UTC

i was going to comment about the fireball and aliens, but really, my favorite thing about this story is the perspective on ray and fraser's post-COTW duet. the sex was delicious, but so was the calm, affectionate way you portray them doing every-day things. very nicely done!!!

akite October 18 2007, 01:37:41 UTC

*twirls* Thank you! I figured that Ray would be good at translating Fraser speak to ordinary people. *g*

amedia October 18 2007, 02:24:15 UTC

I really liked the whole story, but this was my favorite line:

Ray felt privileged. No one else ever got to see Fraser that way, and it made him conscious of how much Fraser loved him.

This is really nifty, because it helps us to draw the connection from hot!sexy!Fraser to the Fraser that other people see. And it puts the whole contextualization in Ray's mind and helps us see where he's coming from - so much coolness in two sentences!

akite October 18 2007, 10:56:11 UTC

Thank you! Thank goodness for beta readers. Now those two lines say what I meant them to say. *g* I'm so happy it struck a cord with you.

sam80853 October 18 2007, 07:07:20 UTC

Awwww, it's great the get a glimpse of their life together. As weird as always I might add ::grins::. And they are living near Carcross which is just around the corner from where I live ::smiles:: - life is good!

akite October 18 2007, 10:58:44 UTC

*nods* I saw how close it was to Whitehorse when I was doing my research. I knew if I got something wrong you could figuratively smack me for it. *g*

luzula October 18 2007, 10:45:03 UTC

I like how people see Fraser as odd in the north too (and not just in Chicago) and how Ray actually fits in better than Fraser does in some ways. And I like the lovely hot established relationship sex.

akite October 18 2007, 11:02:33 UTC

Thank you. I usually write first time stories, but this an exception, and Fraser is Fraser anywhere he happens to be.