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TEAM WHIMSY: Day 6, "I can only"

Sep 03, 2008 07:31

Title: I can only
Author: slidellra
Team: Whimsy
Prompt: "To which I can only say-- oh hell."
Pairing(s): Fraser/Vecchio femmeslash
Length: 6000 words
Rating: R
Warnings: Femmeslash?
Summary: Fraser looks over Detective Vecchio's desk carefully, cataloging what she sees for anything that might be of use in understanding the detective. She adds less ( Read more... )

ds match 2, team whimsy

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slidellra September 24 2008, 20:04:17 UTC

*beams at you* If there is one thing that I love about this story it is that there is so much love in this story. It's everywhere, seeping into everything, and it's gorgeous. And that's a lovely comment, indeed.

I'm glad you enjoyed the fic, SB, and thanks v. much for the comment.

malnpudl September 2 2008, 21:59:21 UTC

I am, first of all, delighted to find a F/V story that I can read! Somehow this doesn't break my OTP at all, the gender switch apparently enough of a departure that my pairing-impaired heart is not troubled. *g*

I am utterly charmed by this story.

Fraser as a woman is still undeniably Fraser, and yet a distinct person and distinctly female. Vecchio, too, is so clearly recognizable even though in my head I'm seeing and hearing a woman, not a man. That's a remarkable accomplishment, just in itself.

Beyond that, you've done a wonderful job of repainting canon events on this new canvas; they all fit so beautifully and make perfect sense.

I love the theme of the list; it ties the whole thing together beautifully. And I love the way the mood of the story dips into the whimsical, woven together with the chronology and the plotty bits and the evolution of the relationship.

Lovely job. I believe in these people. You've made them and their story real to me, and I'm happy that they'll get to live happily ever after in my heart.

slidellra September 24 2008, 20:06:12 UTC

\o/ Very generous of you to give a read, Mal! I am delighted that you enjoyed the fic. I am utterly charmed by this story. is such charming praise. I am all smiles. ♥

brigantine September 3 2008, 05:05:53 UTC

Cool!

I have trouble picturing Fraser as a female, and not looking like Miz Fraser (oh dear!) or Maggie, but I believe that's a shortcoming of my own imagination, not the story. On the other hand, Ray Vecchio in my head looks a lot like Marisa Tomei, but with a bigger nose, which, y'know, I kinda dig. Hee. ;)

The RayV/Fraser closet scene at the end - Yay!

And Fraser's friendship with RayK, so cute!

Ray puts a hand on her arm, then leans back and calls, "I'm taking her, Kowalski."

"Yeah, good luck with that," he replies, absorbed in hyperbolic description of the savage North.

Ha! Love it!

slidellra September 24 2008, 20:08:24 UTC

Hee! Yeah, Ms. Fraser isn't my ideal girl!Fraser image, either. *pets her poor self* I was startled by how smokin' hot I found girl!RayV! Like, very. Rawr.

I'm delighted you enjoyed the fic, honey! Thanks for the lovely comment.

snoopypez September 3 2008, 05:53:08 UTC

This. is. GORGEOUS. I mean, insanely and breathtakingly gorgeous. The ENDING. The LIST. I just.

Nice to see that I love those two no matter what forms they're in.

<3

slidellra September 24 2008, 20:09:17 UTC

*dances* Thank you, honey! Your comment absolutely made my day.

j_s_cavalcante September 3 2008, 07:43:41 UTC

This is excellent. To me, Fraser sounds exactly like Miss Fraser, and looks a lot like her, and that doesn't bother me a bit. It works on her. I had a harder time accepting Ray genderswitched, but the story and the lovely, atmospheric writing carried me along. The "right here, right now" bit with the chairs and the mob guy was priceless...and exactly the sort of thing S1/2 Fraser and Vecchio would have done. Hee!

This exchange had me in stitches (I'm quoting only part of it; the whole thing was hilariously perfect):

"Yeah, it'll make a real good story for your cellmate," Ray mutters sourly. "'I was busted by Charlie's Angels!' you'll say, 'Have fun in the penitentiary,' we'll say. It'll be great."

"Charlie's Angels, Ray?"

"I'll tell you later."

*snort, snicker*

Fraser actually seems quietly tragic to me throughout, though there are lots of other aspects of the narrative that mitigate that effect, especially Fraser's adorable mental list.

The moment when she thinks RayK has never invited her to the Crystal Ballroom...ouch. ( ... )

slidellra September 24 2008, 20:12:10 UTC

Hooray! Thanks, JS, I'm thrilled you enjoyed the fic, especially the bit with the chairs and the mob guy. That was fun to imagine and to write, and it's totally great that it seemed show-appropriate to you.

♥

j_s_cavalcante September 24 2008, 20:25:34 UTC

OMG, I LOVE how you guys have story-specific icons, which you didn't use until after the reveal. That is so excellent!!

Now I want one for mine. *considers*