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TEAM ANGST: Day 13, "The Longest Distance"

Nov 05, 2007 15:10

Title: The Longest Distance
Author: berty_bertle
Team: Angst
Prompt: "That's because you're not pushing hard enough."
Pairing(s): F/K
Length: 9100 words
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: Impending character deaths (end of the world fic).
Author's Notes: Beta thanks to nos4a2no9 for encouragement and hand-holding, to secretlybronte for chats and americanisms and to aukestrel for letting me learn from ( Read more... )

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hurry_sundown November 5 2007, 21:32:07 UTC

Geez. Rip my heart out, why don't you?

*sniffles*

bertybertle November 18 2007, 00:35:10 UTC

*stuffs heart back in and tapes you up*

:-)

luzula November 5 2007, 22:05:24 UTC

It takes the end of the world for them to admit to their feelings? Oh, boys. Okay, I actually find this very romantic. Though, okay, with the impending death thing I guess it's angsty as well. At any rate, I like it, especially all the details in Ray's journey, and that very sweet kiss.

bertybertle November 18 2007, 00:36:32 UTC

It's not romantic! It's STEALTH ANGST! *nod nod nod*

Thanks for taking the time to read. I'm glad you liked it.

brynnmck November 5 2007, 22:40:10 UTC

You create such a great sense of end-of-the-world quiet here, it's lovely, and like luzula said, the details of Ray's journey and Fraser's last day at his post are wonderful. I love that Ray is in conflict, helping with his fists, and Fraser is helping a family-both of those things seem really right for them. And it's fascinating that the saddest thing about this fic isn't the fact that the world is ending, but that they wasted so much time that came before. It's a great last, precious moment of honesty, though, and I love the way they strip themselves down to essentials at the very end.

bertybertle November 18 2007, 13:35:13 UTC

Thank you so much for your lovely detailed comment. I loved the film "Last Night" and I've often wondered how Ray and Fraser would react to that scenario. It's a shame, but I think Fraser would have died alone with only his duty for solace rather than be the first to say something.

neu111 November 5 2007, 22:45:37 UTC

About perfect!

bertybertle November 18 2007, 13:35:53 UTC

*grins* Thank you kindly.

bluebelle789 November 5 2007, 23:06:17 UTC

Wow. I am so glad they finally have each other for 'the end'. Beautifully written. *cries*

bertybertle November 18 2007, 13:37:25 UTC

So was I! I wasn't sure as I was writing it that they would be together at the end, but I'm a wuss, and I couldn't break them when it came to it. *sheepish grin*