First Line Challenge by etcetera-cat

[etcetera_cat]

Title: Aurora Borealis
Author: etcetera_cat
Rating: PG
Pairing: F/K
First Line: Taken from kassrachel's Not To Yield

Comments

[slidellra]

Oh, I love this. The structure and the graceful flow of it, and that description of Ray leaning back on his gloved hands and grinning up the Northern Lights. Fantastic.

[etcetera_cat]

Thank you so much!

[snarkyducky]

the .. whatever thing it is that Ray's wearing on his head.. it makes him look like a bunny! ♥

[keerawa]

I really like the structure of this, the way you show us Fraser's way with words, and Ray's clear understanding of body language.

The sounds of the running dogs and the hissing of the sled runners combine together into a quiet-but-wild welcome home song.
What a beautiful sentence!

[etcetera_cat]

^_^ That beautiful sentence was written on a train station platform whilst trying to avoid the rain and the sturcture was something that happened entirely by accident-- I didn't realise that I was repeating myself until I was most of the way through the first draft.

Thank you for reading!

[keryx]

This made me Eee (that's a good thing). The shape of it moves so lightly from one perspective to another. And Dief's The white place is good for that.... awww.

[etcetera_cat]

<3 That's actually one of my favourite lines from the whole piece. Thanks for reading!

[pearl_o]

I really enjoyed this.

[etcetera_cat]

Thanks for reading :)

[akite]

Ray is beginning to think that is stayed behind in Sounds-like-hens-clucking with Frobisher.

Hee! I loved Ray's smooth move there in the tent too. *g*

[etcetera_cat]

*g* He's a smooth operator, alright. Thanks for reading ^_^