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Badfic challenge - Make It a Foot Long with Everything (by Moosesal)

Apr 17, 2006 22:35

Title: Make It a Foot Long with Everything
Author: Moosesal
Prompt: It was the alien influence from his abduction when he was 10 that made rayk join the police force. The aliens placed a subversive mental command in his MIND that the first time he had sex with his one true love he would go after his true life passion. An undercover hotdog vender ( Read more... )

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shayheyred April 18 2006, 03:03:08 UTC

So instead of becoming a Mountie, Ray Kowalski became a hot dog vendor
Ah, the logic of bad!fic.
And the paragraph where you describe the plot instead of making it actual plot, is hilarious. Great job!

moosesal April 18 2006, 18:38:23 UTC

OMG Thank you! You're my first feedbacker!! You rock.

I'm so glad you appreciated what I was going for here. I tried not to get bogged down in the plot because no one really cares about the plot anyway. Bring on the pr0n!!!!11eleventy!!

Oh wait, I didn't actually write the pr0n either. Umm... it's all about the romance. Yeah, that's it.

geekwriter143 April 18 2006, 03:57:26 UTC

This is genius. I can't decide which is the best, the whole
But you're probably wondering about the whole serial killer thing, right? part, the stratigically placed condiments, or the disappointed alien Mounties. Love it all.

moosesal April 18 2006, 18:38:52 UTC

I like the disappointed alien Mounties the best. :)

Thanks for reading and commenting.

zeenell April 18 2006, 04:48:28 UTC

This made me laugh, a lot.

*grins* LOVED IT!

(mostly because you actually were able to write something based off of my plot. I have no idea what the hell I was thinking when i cam up with that summery)

moosesal April 18 2006, 18:26:41 UTC

Oh good, because when I sat down to write it I was a little confused. Wasn't sure if you meant for Ray's passion to be being an undercover hotdog vendor or a prostitute or a cop. So I just went for it. I'm glad you liked it.

lilac_one April 18 2006, 05:15:28 UTC

This is pretty awful. And that's a compliment.

moosesal April 18 2006, 18:50:47 UTC

Thank you!

ulthyrja April 18 2006, 10:37:13 UTC

"I want to slide a foot long dog between your buns, hot dog boy. I want to do it with mustard and ketchup and relish."

*dies*

I'm still giggling like mad for reading this. Thanks for all the crack!!!

moosesal April 18 2006, 18:51:21 UTC

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed.