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For the "Forgiveness" challenge by KindKit

Aug 09, 2005 20:37

Title: Five Confessions
Author: kindkit
Pairing: Ray K./Fraser
Rating: NC-17
Summary: Ray really needs to tell somebody.
Notes: This is a little rougher than I'd like, but I wanted to get it posted before the challenge closes.

( 4600 words )

Comments 87

pearl_o August 10 2005, 01:00:28 UTC

Oh, I loved this. Poor Ray; poor Fraser. Mmmmmm.

kindkit August 11 2005, 00:24:56 UTC

Thanks so much. *pets Ray and Fraser* I think they'll be okay, though.

ruggerdavey August 10 2005, 01:14:05 UTC

*sniffs* Wow, that is just so really, really fucked up, but it's also so Ray. This was an amazing fic.

kindkit August 11 2005, 00:25:16 UTC

Thank you very much.

grey853 August 10 2005, 01:18:45 UTC

Damn, Ray fucked up big time, but I liked the way you handled it, not making it an easy, I forgive you, Ray, kind of thing.

You pushed a lot of buttons for me on the religious front, too, things that made me want to slap the guy in the white collar. I figure if they're going to send me to hell because of the person I love, they can only send me once so WTF?

kindkit August 11 2005, 00:27:35 UTC

made me want to slap the guy in the white collar

*nods* Well, I think the position he takes is completely wrong, but I also wanted him to be more than just a bad guy, if that makes sense. Which is why I made him gay--he's sort of a victim of his own beliefs.

I'm so glad you liked the story.

grey853 August 11 2005, 01:20:58 UTC

"a victim of his own beliefs." That's an interesting position to take, sort of like he bought the party line and now he's suffering. I could buy that, but problem is, he's peddling the same lies and making others just as miserable. Makes it hard to feel sorry for a guy like that, victim or not. A lot of us get told the same BS growing up. Some people buy it, some don't.

I'm glad Ray was able to see past that garbage and realize loving someone isn't wrong, or a sin, or whatever some bigot in a collar wants to label it.

Sorry, like I said, it pushed a lot of buttons.

brooklinegirl August 10 2005, 01:21:56 UTC

I *love* this. I absolutely LOVE this. I have better feedback for you when I'm not exhausted, but I think you did a *fabulous* job, I think it's sad and real and full of true love and life and them and - yes. WOnderful, wonderful writing.

kindkit August 11 2005, 00:28:24 UTC

*bounces* Thank you so much!

kijikun August 10 2005, 01:40:50 UTC

God I love the ending. It's not happy, it's not sad...its imperfect, and it hurts but there's a whole lot of good there. If that makes any sense at all.

What I mean is I loved this. I loved that Stella wasn't a bitch. I loved that Ray fucked up and can't say it.

Brill. Brill.

kindkit August 11 2005, 00:30:45 UTC

it hurts but there's a whole lot of good there

That's what I was trying for--not to minimize how badly Ray messed up, but also to show that it's not the end of everything. He really, really does love Fraser.

Stella wasn't a bitch

I'm so glad you said that. I like Stella, and it bothers me that she's so often characterized as a bitch just because she gets tired of Ray hanging around bugging her all the time.

Thank you!