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Sweat Challenge by KindKit

Jul 12, 2005 15:25

Title: Perfection in the Work
Author: kindkit
Pairing: Ray K./Fraser
Rating: PG
Summary: A little sweat's a good thing.
Notes: Thanks to glossing for another careful, incisive beta. The title comes from a saying sometimes (probably wrongly) attributed to Aristotle: pleasure in the job puts perfection in the work.

( 2800 words )

Comments 70

glossing July 12 2005, 19:53:52 UTC

YAAAAAAAY!

His dad used to say that there was work that ground you down and work that built you up.
Oh, my. Yeah. I love the link he discovers between dancing and gardening, too.

This is superb, darling. *rereads*

kindkit July 12 2005, 20:09:55 UTC

*bounces* Adding that paragraph made all the difference, I think. The connections at the end seem a lot more natural now.

I say it again: you beta like a goddess.

And I'm so glad you like this story. Because the truth is, I fucking love it. And it's rare for me to feel that good about my own writing.

glossing July 12 2005, 20:16:12 UTC

The connections at the end seem a lot more natural now.
They do!

it's rare for me to feel that good about my own writing.
Dude, that makes me...ecstatic. Wonders of a new fandom, yes? *twirling bearhug*

pearl_o July 12 2005, 20:21:32 UTC

Oh! This story is lovely; I really like the world you've built up here.

kindkit July 13 2005, 01:10:18 UTC

Thank you! I hadn't meant to write quite so much about Inuvik, but it just kept growing.

fairestcat July 12 2005, 20:21:39 UTC

*adores*

I love the way you just gradually slip the details of Ray and Fraser's life into the story, building this perfect picture of them so subtly it's just suddenly *there*.

Just a beautiful and beautifully built story.

kindkit July 13 2005, 01:11:25 UTC

Thank you so much, especially for what you said about structure. I was worried the story might turn out a bit shapeless, so it's great to hear that it worked for you.

shayheyred July 12 2005, 20:31:14 UTC

I am just -- ::flails:: -- so in love with this story. I actually teared up somewhere around If love was a place, Fraser would be the confused guy just off the plane and just kept on from there. I don't know that I've ever read a post-COTW story quite like this, where the compromise, the sweat of a relationship was so poignantly and thrillingly portrayed. Thank you so much.

kindkit July 13 2005, 01:14:38 UTC

I actually teared up

Yay! (Okay, that sounds odd, but it's great that you found the story moving.)

I'm new to this fandom, but so far I haven't seen a lot of established-relationship stories, and that's something that really interests me. How people can be together, day to day, and make it work. So I thought I'd give one a try.

I'm delighted that you enjoyed it.

serialkarma July 12 2005, 20:33:25 UTC

This was really, really excellent.

kindkit July 13 2005, 01:15:08 UTC

Thank you!