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Whomping Fraser

Mar 09, 2004 14:26

Okay, really, honestly, racing in at way the hell past the last second and dear lord, tell me to keep my mouth shut the next time I promise to finish something in a certain amount of time, okay? Many thanks to SnowFlake, my ever-patient beta, for flying through this one with me (any mistakes are my own; she went over this with a fine-tooth comb), ( Read more... )

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pearl_o March 9 2004, 11:46:43 UTC

Oh! I liked this *very* much.

I’m fine, Ray," he says, letting his arm fall from his side, and trying to stand up straighter.

"You got hit by a car, Fraser."

"I'm fine."

"All right. Jeez." I peer at him. "Your face is bleeding. Again."

"Oh, shut up," he says.

My eyebrows fly up. Man. Touchy.

*snicker*

and: This is really easy. This is a tiny step from where we were, only I didn't know it.

Aw, nice.

brooklinegirl March 14 2004, 06:27:18 UTC

Oh, loveliness, thank you - you picked two of my own personal favorites from the writing of this. *g* Thank you, thank you for the feedback!

beledibabe March 9 2004, 11:51:26 UTC

Oh, definitely worth the wait!! Poor darlings, they're just so damn clueless, aren't they?

Very sweet and charming. Thanks!

brooklinegirl March 14 2004, 06:28:26 UTC

utterly clueless, yes, which is one of the (many) things I like about them - how they go out of their way to protect each other, and it sort of, well, backfires at times. *g* Glad you liked it! Thank you!

kassrachel March 9 2004, 11:56:43 UTC

This is lovely!

Poor Fraser. Rough week he's having. (I really like the nosebleed scene, sorry as I feel for the guy!) Excellent ending, though.

And just the right hint of snark throughout...

brooklinegirl March 14 2004, 06:30:05 UTC

So glad you liked it! And glad that my snarky Fraser worked for you - I think Mr. Polite MOuntie only goes so far. *g*

shayheyred March 9 2004, 12:20:26 UTC

Glad we didn't have to wait for another amnesty to see this. Loved it.

brooklinegirl March 14 2004, 06:31:43 UTC

Glad we didn't have to wait for another amnesty to see this. Loved it.

Me too. I had all but the last page written by the time I went to NY on Friday. Something which I mentioned to both estrella30 and Ces. Which, of course, led to me indicating that I could finish it in short order upon arriving home. *sigh* Not so much, but I *am* glad I finished it and got to post.

Glad you liked it!

estrella30 March 9 2004, 12:28:22 UTC

Yippee!! Oh so, so, SO worth the wait!

Taking care of him just a little. Not like anyone else ever does. He's not indestructible. Am I the only one who knows that?

Sigh. Freaking amazing, babe.

brooklinegirl March 14 2004, 06:32:55 UTC

Thank you, hon! You were the one who was all about the encouragement on Friday - leading me to believe that it didn't totally suck and maybe I *should* finish it - so thank *you* for that!

(and - yay - I liked that line that you picked out, too!)