thanks. i know, there's a thin line between oc and mary sue. i hope i can walk the right side of the line. i also tried to keep it mostly on bobby, so even if the omc is obnoxiously gary-stu, he's not all the story is about.
well, if you make no sense, then neither does my brain, because i definately get what you're saying.
AH JOHN CLONE! Only not really. I'm interested to see where you take this character and how things will develope from here. I'm really liking the backstory--Jean being the one to move food with her powers and how the kitchen and dining room at so far away and how now that's Kurt's job. And poor Monet, with how no one will eat what she makes.
jean paul is a comic-canon gay charecter. he's not important until chapter 6, so don't worry. and in that chapter's notes, i'll explain a bit about him, because i steer away from his comic-canon.
i'm glad to see i can still cause a *spaz* or two. :D
I see you've posted three of these in the community recently, and am just now getting to them. So far, though, I must say you've done an excellent job of universe building, and the work you put into setting the atmosphere at the mansion comes across very well. I like to see our boys written with the understanding that they're not morons, and keep an eye to the future at all times. The point where Bobby is thinking to himself that Jean isn't the only friend he's going to lose soon resonates strongly. Outstanding work here. Can't wait to read the rest of it.
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well, if you make no sense, then neither does my brain, because i definately get what you're saying.
thanks for reading!
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and there's a quote, the devil is in the details? *shrug* i really like to do the details.
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*end spaz* I look forewrd to more.
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i'm glad to see i can still cause a *spaz* or two. :D
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So far, though, I must say you've done an excellent job of universe building, and the work you put into setting the atmosphere at the mansion comes across very well.
I like to see our boys written with the understanding that they're not morons, and keep an eye to the future at all times. The point where Bobby is thinking to himself that Jean isn't the only friend he's going to lose soon resonates strongly.
Outstanding work here. Can't wait to read the rest of it.
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