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Nothing Less Than Divine - Chapter 1

Jan 29, 2007 21:24

TITLE: Nothing Less Than Divine.

AUTHOR/ARTIST: bulma90_13.

RATING: NC-17.

PAIRING: John/Bobby, ???/Bobby.

SUMMARY: When one of the students at Xavier’s School for the Gifted is sexually assaulted, Special Victims Unit steps in to uncover the truth.

WARNINGS: Non-consensual, language, work in progress, crossover.

NOTES: Yeah, the story is on ( Read more... )

title: n, rating: nc-17, fiction: series, author: bulma90_13

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Aahh...*sigh* blackbunnysite January 29 2007, 21:35:31 UTC

Have read your story already to chapter six...XD I love it. But there's one thing that was not logical.
If John is a known terrorist, then why would he care about something like a "restraining order"? That's kind of..uhm...strange...
As for everything else: It's really sweet how John cares for Bobby and I find the crossover in this case, good. Because it makes sense.

*kisses* blackbunnysite

Re: Aahh...*sigh* bulma90_13 January 29 2007, 22:43:01 UTC

you are so right....
hmm....
i never thought about that, obviously...
damn, this is why i need a beta.
hmm...well, i guess he left more for the reason that the parents were coming rather than he actually was afraid of the laws. and i guess he was already taking a risk by being around the cops for so long and he needed an excuse to get out of there, because obviously Logan told them about john's mutation and it would be so easy to render him helpless.
i don't know, looking back at that explaination, it looks sucky.
ok, i admit i made a boo boo.
thanks for pointing it out. maybe i'll fix that one day, but for now, just go with it...?
really, thank you!

Re: Aahh...*sigh* blackbunnysite January 30 2007, 11:05:58 UTC

Yeah, well...it's not such a big mistake or anything. And as I said I love your story. You know if I could, I would like to beta your story, but I'm a german gril so I wouldn't be much help at all I think...*drop*

Re: Aahh...*sigh* blackbunnysite January 30 2007, 11:07:35 UTC

PS: What about if John get's called away? Magneto or mystique could send him a message or phone him??

Re: Aahh...*sigh* bulma90_13 January 30 2007, 19:55:39 UTC

such a good idea!! i love you!!
okay, gotta work that into the story...i WILL fix it.
god, you're a genius!
how'd you learn such good english?! i'm in france right now and it's damn hard to learn a new language!

Re: Aahh...*sigh* blackbunnysite January 31 2007, 16:39:28 UTC

*lol* glad that I could help! Well, I always loved english. the language is just so perfect. Just sounds way better than german, anyway...^^ And so I really worked hard in school and now I read only english FF's...
So I guess that's why, I'm okay, with it!? *shruggs* But I still make a lot of mistakes.

Re: Aahh...*sigh* bulma90_13 January 31 2007, 19:09:02 UTC

i fixed it!! yay!! so now when i put up my story here, it will make sense!!!
you so smart! thanks!!!
and i think your english is FAN-tastic!

Re: Aahh...*sigh* blackbunnysite February 2 2007, 01:47:03 UTC

XD Thanks. I'm glad you're approve of my suggestion.^^ I will read your story 'til the end, of course. I really love it. Hope you're going for a good ending... I normaly head for the bad ones. *giggles lik a lunatic*
But I'm kind of a dramaqueen, anyway so....

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