Title: Spiral
Author:
lux_apolloRating: R for violence.
Pairings: Bobby/John, some minor Kitty/Piotr, Scott/Jean and Remy/Rogue seen in this chapter.
Summary: John arrives back at the Brotherhood Base. X-men meeting. Poker night for Bobby and friends. Bobby and Justin have a talk.
Notes: Thanks to
sarahlu81 and
miss_bushido for beta. This fic is cross posted at
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*groans*
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The description of Justin's 'accident' was good and i like that you've left a specific account of what happened with Aleks to a later date.
Loved John threatening Avalanche... little f***er deserved it.
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I'm glad you liked the poker. I was trying to think of something fun for the gang to do that would give them yet another reason to try and drag Justin out of his shell. A more truthful description of his 'accident' will be forthcoming; at least, a description of the accident from Justin's perspective...
Oh, I couldn't resist John having it out with one of the other Brotherhood members. I thought about it being Pietro, but Pietro isn't quite the type of asshole I needed for that scene. Besides, John promised Wanda he'd play nice with her twin. Anyway... most of the Brotherhood have had some major crap fall out in their lives. It would figure that they aren't exactly a happy-go-lucky group, and that there would be a lot of internal, personal conflicts and strife. They are only really united because of their common cause.
At least, that's how I see it.
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"Bobby, are you...?" hee hee. "We were drunk..." ho ho.
I loved how both were revealing themselves and supporting the other. There is the basis for a strong friendship there, I think. Nice natural dialogue as usual. Believeable sense of place. Good choreography and scene transitions. The dangling legs.
In the Pyro/Avalanche scene, I found myself wondering why Avalanche didn't fight back. If John had used his powers to make a threatening fireball, or fire finger or something, he wouldn't have had to restrain Avalanche physically and John's not such a strong guy.
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That was me.
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And (you good writer, you) you had the mystery explained to us later in the chapter by another character in another context. Clever.
I just thought that someone holding a little zippo flame to my crotch is not really as threatening as someone holding a knife and I would just shove them away.
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