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PART 5

Oct 22, 2010 22:58

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You're just so pretty in your pain [3/?] anonymous March 20 2011, 15:22:23 UTC

Frowning just slightly, he increased his pace, ignoring the way his legs and back stung and ached in protest. The pressure in his stomach was getting worse, and there was an increasingly sour taste in his mouth.

Entering one of the dark side alleys, he hid in the shadow cast by two huge buildings. With one hand, he held onto the wall before him, as he took deep, shuddering breaths, hoping the waves of nausea would subside.

Maybe he had been hit in the stomach a couple of times too often in the last couple of hours. Then again, maybe the way his head had been slammed into a wall repeatedly was to blame for the sick feeling seizing his body.

He refused to think that maybe he was just disgusted with the way hands had touched him with very intention of hurting him, while deriving pleasure from his pain. He was above any kind of traumatization any normal human might have suffered from such treatment.

Spitting sour saliva onto the pavement, he still waited, trying to recall when he had last had a normal meal, although thinking about food was probably not the best idea.

He was so busy with trying not to get a grip of himself, that he didn’t notice just where he had decided to take a break.

Trust a few sprains and scratches to completely nullify his capability of observing his surroundings.

A completely unconspicious wodden door was situated a few meters away from him, leading into the staircase, where a small debt collection agency resided, which employed one Heiwajima Shizuo, who, purely by coincidence, had decided to take his smoking break right now.

Izaya had neither noticed the door’s existence, nor realized that it had opened, to reveal his tall, blond haired enemy.

It took Shizuo a few seconds to fully process what he saw. The louse was hunched over, seeking support from the wall in front of him, while breathing raggedly.

“IZAYAAAA!!” The anger came as a natural reaction to seeing the dark haired information broker, who looked up in shock.

“Shizu-chan?” Izaya gasped out, genuine surprise written all over his very pale face.

Shizuo was already looking for something heavy to throw, but to the informant’s luck, there was no vending machine within a ten meter radius.

Instead, Shizuo held the door above his head, several veins throbbing on his forehead, while the informant couldn’t really seem to move.

Fuck, fuck, fuck, fuck...FUCK!! The informant chanted to himself in his head, while his tired legs made him stumble backwards, his agility shot to hell.

He managed to exit the dark alley, bumping into several people, while he moved out onto the street. A slightly trembling hand dove into his pocket to grab his knive, only to find that it was not there.

“I TOLD YOU TO FUCKING STAY OUT OF IKEBUKURO, LOUUUUSE!!” Shizuo had followed him with heavy steps, for once not having trouble keeping up with Izaya.

Negotiating with the monster was out of the question, especially when he was ready to throw something at him.

Hmm...I wonder if I can figure out some more innovative way of them meeting. The whole 'running into each other on the street' thing is so overused. I don't want this fill to be some generic Hurt/Comfort story. I wrote enough of those already -.-'

Re: You're just so pretty in your pain [3/?] anonymous March 20 2011, 16:31:10 UTC

finally they met! I don't know what you're planning but I really like so far!
poor Izaya!!

Re: You're just so pretty in your pain [3/?] anonymous March 20 2011, 17:16:50 UTC

and where could they meet if not on the street? the main pairing i read is shizaya, which usually starts from their violent encounter and many OPs requests rape or smth simular for Izaya(don't sure why though). that really doesn't mean that all such fics are the same now and boring for readers. have some faith in yourself as a writer

Re: You're just so pretty in your pain [3/?] anonymous March 20 2011, 22:19:45 UTC

ouo

Why, hello there, author!anon. I will now be stalking this lovely story of yours, and man am I excited to see how you fill this prompt. I think I have a couple of ideas of who you are, but let's not go embarrassing myself if I'm wrong, huh? 8'D

ANYWAY.

What you've got so far is glorious, and I cannot wait for the next part.

I agree with you on the fact that the street thing is overused. As a reader, it's really not something you'd notice or care about, but as a writer it can get repetitive orz

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