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[drinkwellwords]

Title: Nobody Move
Rating: R-ish
Prompt: record, curse
Summary: You and Kim stop having sex.
Word Count: 694
Disclaimer
Notes: Part of the Have to Explode series. That's right! The unnamed bunch of vignettes has a name, and it's Have to Explode after the Mountain Goats song of the same title, lyrics here. For the spittingink prompts "record" and "curse".

Comments

[_poetic_harlot_]

Fraaaankih. Frankih. So the more you write, the more I'm just sort of blow away by how few words you need to convey every single tiny aspect needed to make these pieces whole. Maybe I wasn't paying attention quite as much, but I'm just seeing that now and it's mesmerizing, to say the very least.

And then there is Tim, and how he is reminding me of those sad, sad chapters where Conor was fading into nothingness with his pain and his drugs. And it's really quite heartbreaking, how one of them always seems to need to be an utter wreck for the other to at least glue a few pieces together.

I want Kim to die, sort of. So Tim can have his baby. But I know you have a plan and I am kind of flailing over the prospect of how this will all turn out. I desperately want them to just...sigh. Find a way to fit and glue pieces together at the same time and nnnn.

...I doubt any of that made sense, haha. I just finished my one final exam so...at least you gave me utterly depressing joy to get my mood sort of back up, haha. You blow my mind <333

[fedradiowires]

Thank you. It means a lot to me that you think I'm a good writer, I hope you know. I don't need a lot of words because I don't think I have a very descriptive style. And, all the pieces are choppy, little bits of ideas coming out to attempt to convey some sort of feeling. It's like, "Segue? What's that?"

Tim. Tim is... well. He's a wreck, alright. You have to see where Kim is coming from, though. Tim is not the greatest man alive, and he's ignored her. I'd want a divorce, too. And I think she just wants to hurt him a little.

Get your bum online. I don't have to work till later. You can blow other things of mine, if you want.

/perv.

<333

[_poetic_harlot_]

You and your pervy nature makes my insides die XPP

But pssh. I think you are a fantastic writer. And it's something I have to admire, because even though you're not overly descriptive, the words you choose always pack enough description. A mass of description, actually. I'm all...wordy and willy nilly with descriptions, where you're short and sweet and delicious.

So yes. You win, choppy bits and all. -petsTimevenifheisabastard-

[fedradiowires]

HAHAHA insides!

I love the fact that you can actually get descriptive, though. I'm jealous, a little bit. And maaaaybe I am like shortbread but you are a chocolate chip cookie.

♥

pee ess - for your fic-in-the-mail, you might just be getting fluff!

[__didntthinkso]

Oh, this story. Oh, it is so sad and it hurts me. But it's so good. I mean, the plus side is that finally this nightmare with Kim is going to end, but Tim is just kind of...spiraling. I feel like he's drowning, and it makes me so sad. And little Sierra. I feel like Sierra's sort of Tim's humanity, and without Conor she's all that keeps him from falling into the abyss of himself. I can only hope you find a way to make it work with them - I love the relationship between Tim and his daughter, here, and he is a good father, I know he is!

Okay. Also, I like the very subtle "October Leaves" reference - or was that just me? It just seemed...aww, Tim like "Your hips have this way of saying 'no way.'" And I liked it. Poor Tim. She used to bring him tomato soup, but she keeps forgetting...

I want them to get together. Can you make it happen? F'r me?

[fedradiowires]

Thank you. I'm so glad you like this. This chapter was probably the chapter I've found the hardest to write so far, mostly because I felt like there was a lot going on. I think Wild Sage Part II will also be very hard. Sierra... oh, what to say about Sierra. She's there for more than that, maybe, but you'll see when it all comes together. If does all come together.

YES. Yes that was an "October Leaves" reference. Although, I was thinking more baked ice cream than tomato soup. Keep looking for references to songs, they'll probably spring up.

I maybe can. Maybe. No promises.

[tricky_slip]

i am totally blown away at how you are so able to capture and convey such strong emotions into seemingly simple words. it's just mind-blowing.
there is some deeper hidden meaning behind every thing in this story, whether you meant it to be there or not, it's just completly drenched with these amazing images. and it's just subtle enough to work. like i read a line, and it takes me a few more to realize the full meaning and impact behind it.
and there is a sadness that is always there, like it's set into the bones of your characters. it's chilling to read.
and the drugs... gah.
there are some stories that focus solely on what the drugs do to a person. this is more. this is the story behind why he does what he does and why he will continue. it doesn't dive farther than that, and that's perfect.
i'm rambling, but i seriously am in love with this story.
this is just beyond anything i've read in a long time. and it really shows how much of an amazing writer you are.
♥

[fedradiowires]

Thank you very much. I'm always surprised by how much you like these, and it's truly flattering. I hope you like the next pieces of it, and the ending, as much as you've liked the beginning and the middle.

[mandlebars]

How do you manage o use such few words to convey so much

[fedradiowires]

It's magic.

Not really, I have absolutely no idea. I used to write very Tolkien-ish, over-angsty, wordy crap. And then a while I go, I said "fuck that", and now I can't be wordy if I try.

I'm glad that you picked up on so much of what's going on in the story, especially the fact that Kim is not so bad as she seems at first glance.

Thank you for reading this, and giving such a thorough comment.

[mandlebars]

magic orly?
you keep writing I keep commenting, deal? :)

[fedradiowires]

Yarly.

Deal!

[elenlor_edhelen]

I have so much love for this story.

You think maybe you should have married Jenny, who's almost as fond of Conor as she is of her drugs, instead of Kim.

I love how this line elucidates just how centered on Conor, Tim is. And the last line is so powerful. I can't wait to see what dark depths this story takes Tim to.

[fedradiowires]

Thank you so much! I always look forward to your comments, and I'm just glad you look forward to more pieces.