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Nightmares Chapter 5

Nov 18, 2011 02:52

Title: Nightmares
Author: hobbitgrl
Spoilers: References up through "Documentary Filmmaking: Redux"
Rating: NC-17 (for serious)
Warning: There's serious angst here. I'm not being hyperbolic. Serious angst. There's also smut in future chapters. And angsty smut. And language.
Word Count: 2,964
Disclaimer: I own no part of Community or it's awesomeness ( Read more... )

character: annie, fan: fiction, fan: fiction (multi-chapter), character: jeff

Comments 13

Beautiful meinstilllife November 18 2011, 12:21:30 UTC

I read through all chapters so quickly I didn't slow to leave reviews on them.

Well, you weren't lying about the angst. But really? I love this. I know people who put themselves through what Jeff is putting himself through, so I sympathize with Annie. I have been in her place.

I love that Trobed comes crashing into the bathroom to protect Annie.

Even though there was angst, I love the humor that you slip in. The fact that TroBed showed the group the shadow puppet show and Jeff cried (even though I am pretty sure that was supposed to be a serious moment), that Abed is so in tune with life that he is Jeff's narrator. All of it.

It's just what we need as we suffer through the darkest timeline.

Re: Beautiful drgirl11 November 18 2011, 19:21:25 UTC

Thank you so much. I was incredibly nervous about posting this because--yeah. These aren't the sort of subject matters you want to screw up, so I really appreciate that it worked for you and served the purpose I hoped.

Oh darkest timeline indeed.

rorge November 18 2011, 20:11:16 UTC

The build of angst has really been quite wonderful, so far. Jeff's breakdown in this chapter feels totally earned, and I love that Annie is there for him.

She's so strong in this chapter. That's how I like Annie the most. Tough, formidable, take no BS. And I think Jeff really likes her like that too.

Troy and Abed as unsure, concerned spectators is perfect. I hope they continue to build up that pseudo-sibling bond between them in the show.

I've not really commented on the nature of Jeff's angst, the physical abuse, because I really have no frame of reference for it. I think the chances that Jeff's dad beat his mother, and him, are pretty high, given what we know of him. I really can't wait to find out more on that front, both in your fic and in the show (network gods willing, of course).

drgirl11 November 20 2011, 08:39:16 UTC

Thank you so much. I really appreciate that you felt the angst was earned here. That's one of the big things I was really worried about and I'm so happy you felt it worked.

serene_ray November 18 2011, 22:12:16 UTC

oh my god, that ending!

brought a tear to my eye. good job, this whole thing was great.

drgirl11 November 20 2011, 08:40:42 UTC

Thank you and so appreciated!

heartjd November 19 2011, 01:08:05 UTC

That was really powerful. Wow.

And I like Annie's attitude in this one, really.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

drgirl11 November 20 2011, 08:42:26 UTC

I often feel Annie's strength goes underappreciated. In my imagination I love everyone's exploration of it. Hopefully will have the next chap up soon!

this is utter praise classicfreak November 19 2011, 03:00:28 UTC

There are tears in my eyes, making this difficult to write but this story is utterly perfect ( ... )

Re: this is utter praise drgirl11 November 20 2011, 08:54:28 UTC

Sometimes I find Jeff and Annie so utterly heartbreaking; at other times I'm squealing with joy at their relationship. I suppose that's one of the many reasons we're all drawn to them. I can still remember my utter glee after Debate 101 and while I understood the arc moving away through Season 1, when I got to their kiss at the end it was like getting the present for Christmas you didn't even dare to dream about. I have spent so much time lurking, enjoying everyone's stories and feeling so grateful something like this Community (lj and the tv show!) exist that I didn't even realize how much the show meant to me until I thought it might be taken away. I am so incredibly touched this story could communicate some of that emotion to you. I had a lot of trepidation when I posted this (too dark/not dark enough did I stay in character?) and now I just hope and pray the next chapters keep it up.

Re: this is utter praise classicfreak November 20 2011, 17:30:09 UTC

I feel the same way, I started the series just before season 3 started, and I admit to watching all the episodes in a short amount of time, but I immediately fell in love (within the first episode). The moment Jeff kissed her hand I boarded this ship and I never want to leave. Jeff and Britta may have been canon but I relationship betweeen 2 kids can almost never last. Annie would be able to deal with his shit and help him grow into the adult he needs to be.
Not gonna lie, I squee'd so loud during debate and nearly passed out out of happiness during the finale.

This was completely perfect in every way you were scared of. Jeff is completely in Character (but to be honest normal people can act way out of character when they are bombarded or they need to get out of a situation, but you didn't have that problem) and at the beginning I didn't think it would get this dark but it flowed so perfectly that if you had gone any lighter it would not have made sense.