Brigit's Flame - January 2009 - Week 1

[dreamy_idealist]

Hello, and Happy New Year!

brigits_flame is back!

I logged in to drop out. Yet, somehow the nice reminder from the mods I found in my inbox urged me to keep trying. I like to honor my commitments so I wrote something. I wish I had more time. Thanks for reading.

This week's topic is ANGELS.

Comments

Re: Edit

[dreamy_idealist]

Hey! Good to see you editing me again. I really value your edits. I wish you all the best for 2009. ;)

I'm getting a more hopeless vibe from it.
I can't help spreading my pessimism sometimes. It might also be because you have read and edited some of my previous stories.

Why is the angel's name just Angel?
Angels are sexless so is the character, here. I tried not to use pronouns, which wasn't an easy task.

The whole setting of this story is pretty unclear to me.
It was meant to be a longer piece, dialogue between three people, but ideas weren't coming, hence why I nearly dropped out. The basic plot: colleagues' small talk at the coffee machine on a new day at work. I pictured a large open space, but I wanted to make it all white and clear, I sort of imagined them on a cloud. The point was that when reading we would believe we are on earth in a regular office with regular workers. The last line would reverse the situation and we realize we are in Heaven the workers are Angels, the boss is God.

I hope I answered your questions. Thank you for the edit, it does help a lot. I could sure use more proofreading!

Re: Edit

[darkspirited1]

Wow. So I saw the theme and thought maybe you were just writing about a character named Angel and a typical day at work. Then, I started trying to figure out if Angel was a boy or a girl because I noticed you never mentioned it. Then you mentioned the boss. That last line was great. I wasn't expecting that at all. Thanks for the surprise.

Further proofreading and all to come. Tis too late at night for that LOL.

Re: Edit

[dreamy_idealist]

Thank you! I love it when people understand my ideas. Sometimes I think about adding author's notes after the story to clarify my point(s).

Further proofreading and all to come.
I'd love that if you have the time and patience. Thank you :)