DUET 4: rivertempest and ariel_riddle

[ningloreth]

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Title: What The Heart Wants
Author: rivertempest
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 8,046
Summary: Hermione Granger has always known, since the very first day at Hogwarts, that Draco

Comments

[hiddenhibernian]

What a story, I loved seeing all the little ways the present had shifted slightly to the left due to Voldemort's absence. It was lovely to see Sirius and Harry being so close, and Snape being his cantankerous self but a free agent. And of course Draco and Hermione, the ending was just perfect.

[rivertempest]

Thank you so much, Hiddenhibernian! This was a lot harder to create that I first thought it would be. I mean, I'm used to creating dystopian-like AU's... but this was a complete 180 from what I usually write.

The first thing that was cemented in my mind was that Harry was definitely raised by Sirius... and god, what a difference everything took on after that. I loved that I didn't have to kill off characters that most people loved or wanted to develop more, so that was a huge bonus. ;)

Again, thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[ningloreth]

I love Hermione's idea of a fool-proof test: kiss me! Yes, that is so going to work! (And I love the way you set it up, with the teachers asking weird questions).

When I read the prompt, I didn't really appreciate what an impact the 'no war or Voldemort' would have. You've turned it into a brilliant story, with Draco free to become the person he should be.

[rivertempest]

Mwhahahaha, you probably thought I was going to choose the prompt that dealt with a Voldy Wins! AU. I thought about it, but then realized a lot of the stories I wrote for Duet were kinda dark... so why not something lighter?

LOL, I totally snagged the potion from cannon, but Scolpalomine is an actual drug that anesthesiologists use to reduce nausea and the like after surgery. And it's damn scary in its natural form. Seriously, it wipes your free-will and you will do anything anyone says and not remember a thing. Eep!

Thank you, my dear, for running a most awesome fest! *glomps*

[darkcivet]

He was sober all along. *shivers* Then I could've done without that lip-lock with Pansy.
Anyway. This had such great characterisation throughout I wouldn't know where to begin to start praising it. The dialogue shone through here really well and you had me glued to my computer screen.
There's a delicate balance between dialogue and narrative required to produce something this brilliant but you nailed it. Thank-you so much for writing something so AMAZING. :-)

[rivertempest]

Yeah, I wouldn't want to be sober for that snog, either. *blanches*

I'm glad you liked the characterizations, as I was truly worried that I wouldn't be able to pull off the... uhm, angst(?) that the original story had that shaped the characters. While they didn't have death and destruction hanging constantly over their heads, maybe the trials of everyday life could provide some causation for events to happen.

Thank you so much, Darkcivet, for the lovely comments. I'm glad you enjoyed the story!

[ariel_riddle]

Oh my gosh!
I adore this story!
I love how you managed to show so many differences--subtle and major--of living in a Volde-less world!
From the moment the story starts, it grips me. The heated moments with Pansy, the delightful interactions with Luna, the professors who are on point, and then the dramione--which I feel like develops effortlessly.
Draco laid his forehead against hers, breathing erratically. “Any other requests?”
^^Loved this part, and I was wondering if he'd ingested some of the pollen or simply opted to fill her request of his own volition C:
I liked the part where he is explaining to Hermione that it's not as much that she's a Muggleborn, but that she's not a Pureblood that bothers him. Brilliant.
Very lovely story--thanks so much!

[rivertempest]

*does happy dance*

I'm so glad you liked this, Ariel Riddle!! I wanted to step outside the box and you gave me that opportunity, so thank you! I waffled quite a bit between your 1st and 2nd prompt, but #2 won out. ;)

I adore Luna, and she always makes an atmosphere inviting with her wacky ways. I've never really dealt much with Pansy, so this was a chance to stretch my fingers on her, too. I loved building this world without Voldemort, how things would've changed, how many people would still be alive! God, it was so awesome to write that Harry lived with Sirius and Remus, and that Snape was still around, still a bastard, and still picked on Gryffindors.

Thank you so much, again, for giving me fantastic prompts to work with and I'm glad you liked this story!

[ariel_riddle]

I'm fond of both ideas but I'm glad you chose this one because it was interesting to see a wizarding world without Volde's influence. You blew this one out of the water!

It was cool how you still managed to bring in issues and angst just with everyday life! You're rendition of Luna is awesome and I liked how Snape still gave the Lions a hard time. I was super thrilled with the fact that Sirius and Remus were alive and Harry was with them, that was a nice plus!

I'm glad you liked the prompts and thanks for writing this story.

[crissytje]

“And then spit,” Hermione added conspiratorially.
-> Hahaha nice one!

“Miss Parkinson, you may leave,” Snape intoned sharply. “There is no earthly reason for you to remain in this class when your main objective is to become Mr Malfoy’s wife once you leave Hogwarts.”
-> I love your Snape!

Your worried Hermione is so sweet and cute!

Aw he liked her all along! So sweet. I’m glad they will have a chance now to be together.

[rivertempest]

*giggles*

I couldn't help the crude humor. hehehehhe

I adore Snape, and it was so awesome that I got to keep him alive in this story.

I think, instead of being so swotty, Hermione would've been a worry-wort with Harry if there hadn't been Voldemort in their world at that time. Because let's face it, she was always going to be a bit OCD. ;)

Thank you Crissytje, for the lovely comments!