A commercial/Teaser and the pain of writing fanfic
Ahh, don't we all know the feeling of having written a loooooooooong story, all those sweaty summer nights with no action exept on the sheet of paper...
..and nothing. No one either reads, or worse yet, there are a couple of hundred reads but no reviews. Why do we do it? Why do we bother? Cause it's fun? Cause we can't help it? Cause it's fun? Cause sometimes -just sometimes- someone reviews..?
So this is a commercial break, or a teaser of dialogue, to get someone here possibly interested in my story "Temptation Waits?". It's not a story where they get together in chapter 1..or 2 or 3...but it oughta be an interesting read/ride. At least I hope, and have been told so, too. So, here's a teaser.
TEASER 1
“’Ladies’ first. Truth or dare? Or do we jump straight to strip poker?” Malfoy stared at Hermione with one of his eyebrows lifted.
Hermione was happy she didn’t blush. “I think we can leave the stripping part out, Malfoy!”
“We were supposed to learn about each other, get to know each other.” he explained slowly as if to a child.
“We can do that with our clothes on. So, you asked me truth or dare. I say dare.”
Draco was a very surprised that she was willing to do a dare, until he realized they couldn’t leave these rooms. No chance for public humiliation then. Too bad, although he didn’t think he would’ve made her do that anyway. It was far too entertaining to humiliate her with just the two of them.
“Okay. Let’s start off easy, to warm ourselves up. I say…go to your room, get all of your clothes off and put on the smallest towel you can find. And bring your clothes back to me.”
”If looks could kill I’d be dead,” Draco thought, but Hermione didn’t try to make any excuses, as she got up and went to her bedroom. After awhile she came back wrapped in a skimpy bright pink towel and threw her clothes on Malfoy. She was satisfied to see the amazed look on his face. “There.” she thought.
His first instinct screamed at him to get those filthy mudblood infested rags off of him. He shook himself and let them fall to the floor. He could smell her in those clothes. Even the intimate scents. “Wait. Stop right there. Intimate scents of a mudblood? Do not go there. Just tease the girl. Don’t let yourself be affected.” he ordered himself.
Hermione sat back on the floor as gracefully as a muggle princess wearing the dress of her dreams. Draco couldn’t help but stare at her apparent ease and her creamy shoulders and even creamier thighs. Merlin!
TEASER 2
“You want to become an auror, huh?” he finally said. Hermione could only stare at him in amazement.
“Yes. Why?”
“Isn’t that a bit…dangerous? Shouldn’t you try teaching Divination or needle point or something?”
“For your information, I am perfectly capable of taking care of myself. In fact, I am totally capable of taking care of others too, that’s why I want to be an auror. Besides, Divination is all a hoax and I’m not into needlepoint either.”
“I think you’re biting off more than you can chew. You’re just a girl.”
“A girl? I’m a grown woman. I’m of legal age. And I’m the top witch of our year. I think I can handle it.”
“Don’t. Because you can’t.” Malfoy looked at her seriously, and only then it sank in to Hermione that he knew Voldemort. And that it was Voldemort that wanted him dead. “You have no idea.”
“Don’t tell me what I can or can’t do!! And why do you care anyway! You oughta be happy to get rid of me. Don’t you want to rid the world of all mudbloods? So Voldemort tortures and kills me? You got your wish!”
“Don’t assume to know me and know what I wish.”
“You’ve made it pretty clear this far.” Hermione snapped.
“I don’t think I have.”
Before Hermione had time to think, time to react or even had a chance to collect her thoughts, Draco’s lips were tightly on hers. He kissed her with ferocity and hunger, and clearly with great deal of anger as well. Hermione could taste the blood in her mouth that his cruel kiss brought.
Almost as quickly as the kiss had come about, it was over. Malfoy pulled himself off and backed up a step. They stared at each other, breathing heavily.
“What was THAT?” she asked.
“I knew you were inexperienced Granger, but I didn't think it was this bad. That was a kiss. I can see you haven’t been kissed a lot. Krum wasn’t very good, was he? Or maybe he wasn’t very keen on you. Potter and Weasley haven’t sampled you either I take it?”
“You..you…MALFOY! How can you say things like that!!”
“Quite well. It was the truth. Kind of tiresome actually.”
“I see. I guess you have more experience then.”
“You could say that, yes.” he mused.
“Then why is it that you know NOTHING of women?” and with that, she pushed him to the wall. He was too shocked and surprised to put up a fight. She bit and nibbled on his neck and licked his jawline sensually and then, finally, put her lips on his. She kissed him fully, boldly and taking her time. Her tongue crept in to explore his mouth and his tongue. It wasn’t a kiss of an unexperienced girl. It was a kiss of a woman who knew she could drive a man crazy. As Draco opened his mouth more and started to kiss her back, she let go of him and looked him teasingly in the eyes.
“So Malfoy, you were saying?”
..and nothing. No one either reads, or worse yet, there are a couple of hundred reads but no reviews. Why do we do it? Why do we bother? Cause it's fun? Cause we can't help it? Cause it's fun? Cause sometimes -just sometimes- someone reviews..?
So this is a commercial break, or a teaser of dialogue, to get someone here possibly interested in my story "Temptation Waits?". It's not a story where they get together in chapter 1..or 2 or 3...but it oughta be an interesting read/ride. At least I hope, and have been told so, too. So, here's a teaser.
TEASER 1
“’Ladies’ first. Truth or dare? Or do we jump straight to strip poker?” Malfoy stared at Hermione with one of his eyebrows lifted.
Hermione was happy she didn’t blush. “I think we can leave the stripping part out, Malfoy!”
“We were supposed to learn about each other, get to know each other.” he explained slowly as if to a child.
“We can do that with our clothes on. So, you asked me truth or dare. I say dare.”
Draco was a very surprised that she was willing to do a dare, until he realized they couldn’t leave these rooms. No chance for public humiliation then. Too bad, although he didn’t think he would’ve made her do that anyway. It was far too entertaining to humiliate her with just the two of them.
“Okay. Let’s start off easy, to warm ourselves up. I say…go to your room, get all of your clothes off and put on the smallest towel you can find. And bring your clothes back to me.”
”If looks could kill I’d be dead,” Draco thought, but Hermione didn’t try to make any excuses, as she got up and went to her bedroom. After awhile she came back wrapped in a skimpy bright pink towel and threw her clothes on Malfoy. She was satisfied to see the amazed look on his face. “There.” she thought.
His first instinct screamed at him to get those filthy mudblood infested rags off of him. He shook himself and let them fall to the floor. He could smell her in those clothes. Even the intimate scents. “Wait. Stop right there. Intimate scents of a mudblood? Do not go there. Just tease the girl. Don’t let yourself be affected.” he ordered himself.
Hermione sat back on the floor as gracefully as a muggle princess wearing the dress of her dreams. Draco couldn’t help but stare at her apparent ease and her creamy shoulders and even creamier thighs. Merlin!
TEASER 2
“You want to become an auror, huh?” he finally said. Hermione could only stare at him in amazement.
“Yes. Why?”
“Isn’t that a bit…dangerous? Shouldn’t you try teaching Divination or needle point or something?”
“For your information, I am perfectly capable of taking care of myself. In fact, I am totally capable of taking care of others too, that’s why I want to be an auror. Besides, Divination is all a hoax and I’m not into needlepoint either.”
“I think you’re biting off more than you can chew. You’re just a girl.”
“A girl? I’m a grown woman. I’m of legal age. And I’m the top witch of our year. I think I can handle it.”
“Don’t. Because you can’t.” Malfoy looked at her seriously, and only then it sank in to Hermione that he knew Voldemort. And that it was Voldemort that wanted him dead. “You have no idea.”
“Don’t tell me what I can or can’t do!! And why do you care anyway! You oughta be happy to get rid of me. Don’t you want to rid the world of all mudbloods? So Voldemort tortures and kills me? You got your wish!”
“Don’t assume to know me and know what I wish.”
“You’ve made it pretty clear this far.” Hermione snapped.
“I don’t think I have.”
Before Hermione had time to think, time to react or even had a chance to collect her thoughts, Draco’s lips were tightly on hers. He kissed her with ferocity and hunger, and clearly with great deal of anger as well. Hermione could taste the blood in her mouth that his cruel kiss brought.
Almost as quickly as the kiss had come about, it was over. Malfoy pulled himself off and backed up a step. They stared at each other, breathing heavily.
“What was THAT?” she asked.
“I knew you were inexperienced Granger, but I didn't think it was this bad. That was a kiss. I can see you haven’t been kissed a lot. Krum wasn’t very good, was he? Or maybe he wasn’t very keen on you. Potter and Weasley haven’t sampled you either I take it?”
“You..you…MALFOY! How can you say things like that!!”
“Quite well. It was the truth. Kind of tiresome actually.”
“I see. I guess you have more experience then.”
“You could say that, yes.” he mused.
“Then why is it that you know NOTHING of women?” and with that, she pushed him to the wall. He was too shocked and surprised to put up a fight. She bit and nibbled on his neck and licked his jawline sensually and then, finally, put her lips on his. She kissed him fully, boldly and taking her time. Her tongue crept in to explore his mouth and his tongue. It wasn’t a kiss of an unexperienced girl. It was a kiss of a woman who knew she could drive a man crazy. As Draco opened his mouth more and started to kiss her back, she let go of him and looked him teasingly in the eyes.
“So Malfoy, you were saying?”