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Pos/Neg, Chapter Three

Feb 03, 2006 20:33

Title: Pos/Neg
Author: Donner
Summary: After a mysterious breakup between Angel and Collins, Angel and Mark get together. Issues from disease, to social acceptance, is thrown about as some people question Mark's motives and Angel's judgement skills.
Rating: Now PG-13
Pairing: Angel/Collins, Mark/Angel
Fandom: RENT
Disclaimer: I don't own emotion, ( Read more... )

mark, mark/angel, pos/neg, angel/collins, angel, collins

Comments 11

minkhollow February 4 2006, 02:17:53 UTC

::snerk:: The last scene was great. (Silly Mimi, Angel DEFIES typical gender classifications! Mark can still be straight and in love with Angel! XD)
Dialogue thing: Still getting better, still with room for improvement.
There're a few sentences that randomly seem to have lost their punctuation; not sure if that's your word processor playing silly buggers with you or what.
Also: much to popular belief, he’s not 'Much' doesn't feel llike the right word for that. 'Contrary,' maybe?
...Okay, I'll stop now. XD

pockyjunkie February 4 2006, 02:55:52 UTC

Don't worry, honey! You are entirely entitled to poo all over my work! I give you permission.

Oh shit. They lost punctuation? Now I have to go look at that... I really do hate Word Perfect. The Spellcheck is just as bad.

One day I will get over my damn Jersey-talk and learn how to write properly...

minkhollow February 4 2006, 03:00:15 UTC

::snerk:: It's all about the concrit, really. I just don't want the bit where I like the story to get lost in all that.

pockyjunkie February 4 2006, 03:01:51 UTC

*hands a Burger King crown with a piece of masking tape that says "CONCRIT GURU"* Don't worry, sweetheart! If you didn't like the fic so much, you wouldn't try to improve it, right?

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lilmimimarquez February 4 2006, 04:21:09 UTC

I love it!!!!!! more,more,more

pockyjunkie February 4 2006, 16:31:57 UTC

Yesssss Thank you :D

streaminginsnow February 4 2006, 08:38:05 UTC

She was much taller than Angel, wearing heels that looked like they pushed her feet up one hundred-eighty degrees.

Someone didn't pay attention in geometry class. 180 degrees is flat, it would have pushed her feet over and completely upside down. Now, I've seen some interesting shoes in my day, but none that defy the laws of physics like that.

pockyjunkie February 4 2006, 16:43:54 UTC

GYAH. I feel so stupid right now. It'd be a perpendicular bisector, right?

alice____xx February 4 2006, 17:50:51 UTC

Aww...it's fics like this that remind me why I like Mimi. xD

MARK/ANGEL GOODNESS! Ohmigee, update now! -spazz-

pockyjunkie February 4 2006, 18:29:05 UTC

*pets* Ahh... my darling Alice... and yeah, I need to write fics like this, or I might throw something at Mimi most of the time.