Cruisin' Through Love [PG] for czarmar (3/3)

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Title: Cruisin’ Through Love
Author: widthsandcurves
Rating: PG
Recipient: czarmar
Disclaimer: JK Rowling's characters do not belong to me.
Warnings: This fic is a victim of scope creep.
Author Notes: To czarmar, let me just say that your prompt was a huge challenge for me, for reasons that I will not go into. The premise may seem a bit out of the blue and I apologize for

Comments

[ningloreth]

This is a really fun story! There's something so enjoyable about plots that take the protagonists out of their element and throw them into close proximity.

I loved your Rose, with her plans and her acronyms; your polite, solemn Scorpius; your Draco, who (as Hermione noticed) was a softened version of his childhood self; and your Hermione, clever, hard-working and loving. I enjoyed all the day trips -- I get the impression you know Capri well?

But my favourite bit was this:

“...I don't think my dad likes your mum very much ... I heard him call her a bushy haired know-it-all once.”

“That just means he likes her," she assured. "Aunt Ginny said he was always picking on mum when they were at school. Obviously he had a huge crush on her.”

You've not only summed up Draco/Hermione, you've also shown Ginny's perceptiveness, and (most of all) Rose's blithe confidence!

[rafiki_tiki]

This story was just so much fun to read. Thank you mystery author. I quite enjoyed how you worked in other members of the Potterverse (Blaise as a muggle enthusiast! HILARIOUS!) and I've been chuckling gleefully throughout this fun lighthearted read.

And it's a testament to your writing skills that I didn't even realise until halfway through that Scor and Rose are acting a lot like the twins from parent trap (which was one of my fave movies growing up---all that summer camp goodtime-ness).

You've got a real gift for creating humorous scenes out of otherwise mundane trivial things, like:
Harry spewing coffee out of his mouth in shock after reading his Sunday morning e-mail. In all likelihood, he'd call Ginny into the room to verify that he wasn't dreaming

Great work and I'm looking forward to the big reveal!

[mccargi]

This was funny, sweet, and reminded me very much of a skewed version of the Parent Trap. I love that Scorpius was a Hufflepuff, I have never seen that sorting deviation (usually he goes Ravenclaw or sometimes Gryffindor in AU). Rose being a Slytherin indulges in an extension of all of Hermione's Slytherin tendencies and is actually quite perfect.

Well Done!

[phloxness]

That was really fun, and a pleasant change from where I thought it was going - I loved that they turned Rose and Scorpius' scheming back on them! It was nice to have them "in like" at the end, and nothing too dramatic and unrealistic for a six-day story!

:)

[rzzmg]

So sweet and funny! I really liked this story. It highlights all of my favorite things about a fluffy, romantic Dramione - witty verbal fencing, light-hearted sexual tension, and neither of them are so particularly ascerbic that there's no working around their flaws. I loved how they worked together to teach their bosy-body children a lesson, and found the bridge they needed to try for something on their own.

Favorite line: "No," he sat himself in an armchair, "I came all this way to impose my presence on you, with the hopes that your annoyance would provide a satisfactory source of amusement." He gave her an impudent grin.

Classic Draco.

Oh, and the socks with sandals... LOLOLOLOLOLOLOL!

Wonderful, brilliant job here, mystery author!