Madness [PG] for Jodylips

Oct 21, 2008 07:40

Title: Madness
Author/Artist: rosweldrmr
Rating: K+
Disclaimer: Harry Potter © J.K. Rowling // Quote: "There is always some madness in love. But there is also always some reason in madness." -Friedrich Nietzsche
Warnings: first person, present tense
Summary: Even as much as she loves order and structure, there's still a part of her that's trying to prove she ( Read more... )

exchange: shine a light

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paatriiing October 21 2008, 14:03:38 UTC
I like the way it's written, like it's thoughtful/pensive but with a lightness that makes it easy to read. And I know D/Hr is our ship, so unfaithfulness that ends up with them somehow together is supposedly acceptable (hee), but it really flies here; it seems so justified (hee again). I can imagine them so well in the garden. :)

Er, though maybe we could get a teensy glimpse of why she chooses to be with Draco even if she's with Ron (if it IS Ron) or why she can't leave Ron when she's evidently in love with Draco? Just a thought. :)

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paatriiing December 1 2008, 16:01:37 UTC
Thanks for the input.

I appriciate the review, and the suggestions.
I'm glad you liked it, especially the style. :)

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skybound2 October 21 2008, 15:26:31 UTC
Great use of the quote. The whole thing feels very ethereal, and while there are lots of unanswered questions, I think it fits with the whole theme of the story nicely. Well done.

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skybound2 December 1 2008, 16:03:00 UTC
I love that you called it ethereal.

And you liked how I used the quote. I was quite nervous about it, actually.

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skybound2 December 1 2008, 16:18:54 UTC
No need to be nervous about, it really does suit the whole frame of the story nicely.

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empathapathique October 21 2008, 19:41:52 UTC
I really liked this. I loved the snippets of dialogue, and Draco's voice was beautiful. Their situation is so bad, but lovely at the same time. I loved the raw honesty in Draco's words. Excellent work :)

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empathapathique December 1 2008, 16:04:11 UTC
Thank you for reviewing.

I can't tell you how much I appriciate your comments.

And that you liked Draco's voice. I didn't know if first person POV would work. So, I'm very glad you liked it.

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anonymous December 1 2008, 16:05:07 UTC
Poetry... wow.

That's just about the last thing I'd think to compare my writing to. So thank you. It's very flattering.

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kazfeist October 22 2008, 04:47:10 UTC
I think I quite agree with the first poster...while we finally find out that Hermione is going to continue to be unfaithful to Ron, one wonders why it has to be thus, if the war is over and Voldemort is no more. Lovely, lyrical work, though. :D

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kazfeist December 1 2008, 16:06:33 UTC
Thanks for the suggestion.

I realize now, there are things that I should have changed or fleshed out more... but at the time I was so pressed.

Thank you for reviewing, and calling it 'Lyrical'. Thank you.

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