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majesticzaichik November 5 2011, 22:49:23 UTC
HAHAHA! Hilarious! I think this would be a great entry. Crazy people at the old folks home. When my grandma used to work at the mental ward, she had to take care of someone like Reggie. Now she's at an old folks home herself.

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dizzydog November 6 2011, 00:45:02 UTC
Yay! I'll be an entry once I pick all the mistakes out :D

I used to run into people like this all the time on the bus and metro, so have a lot of real-life examples to model for me :D

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kdb22 November 5 2011, 23:00:25 UTC
ROFL!

Seriously. I was barking with laughter by the time I hit "Hahahaaaah! I think I peed!" :D

A unique spin on the topic, as expected. Two wonderful twists, which you've become known for. And funny as hell. "Stripper Tits!" "Viva Resistance!" *rolls on the bed, holding her stomach, with tears streaming down her face*

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dizzydog November 6 2011, 00:45:37 UTC
*giggles* My work is done here ;)

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roina_arwen November 6 2011, 00:18:19 UTC
This was great! My only editorial comment would be to modify the sentence about the "elderly individuals seated on a cross between a couch and a long bench" ... It makes it sound like they are seated on a cross, if you see what I mean? Maybe just change it to "a long, padded bench".

Otherwise, great job!

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dizzydog November 6 2011, 00:47:23 UTC
Yay! And THANKS! I had a mental split in the sentence so it made sense to me, but after you pointed it out all I could picture is a bunch of grannys perched on the arms of a cross like crows :D Fixed!

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tigrkittn November 6 2011, 02:09:53 UTC
Speaking of seating arrangements, "They sat in a circle, lounged back in a couple recliners" is a little confusing to me. Might just be me?

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minnesattva November 6 2011, 11:30:29 UTC
Not just you :) Sounds to me like they have to share the couple of recliners then. And that these must thus be semi-circular recliners.

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sweeny_todd November 6 2011, 00:24:07 UTC
like! a neat take on the topic :-D

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dizzydog November 6 2011, 00:48:48 UTC
Thanks! It took me a while to get all the poop jokes out of my system to come up with this one :D

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sweeny_todd November 6 2011, 00:52:37 UTC
hehe. For me.. I didn't even go there. Although I did think about ending my entry on "oh shit!"

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miintikwa November 6 2011, 01:04:19 UTC
HEE! Awesome! :D I totally laughed aloud.

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dizzydog November 6 2011, 02:12:00 UTC
Excellent, if I made someone laugh it was worth writing :D Thanks!

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