Prompt Post 2!

Mar 20, 2011 02:21



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(3/3) justicepop July 16 2012, 10:56:50 UTC
He breaks through, blinking and cursing, into the sun.

He can hardly see a thing. He's naked and filthy and encrusted with all manner of disgusting residue. All he wears is a pair of goggles on his eyes and a shovel on his back. The dirt covers him as thick as a real mole's fur. Mole sniffs at the air and squints at the people around him and he feels the breeze blowing everywhere on his sensitive, earth-covered skin.

Finally something breaks the silence.

"Well there," says Mr. Thatch. "It looks like we've got company, Whitman."

"Either we've both had too much to drink and we're imagining the underground molemen have finally come for us, or we've just found the man we need." Mole can't really see it yet, but he can feel one of them smile at him. "You a geologist or just insane, son?"

"Of course," snaps Mole. "What else do I look like?"

When Audrey tells the story of how Mr. Whitman met Mole, she doesn't censor it, like he did. After the description of Mole's "naked mole rat" flapping in the wind in all its glory, she doesn't stop laughing at the look on Sweet and Vinny's faces for weeks.

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Re: (3/3) justicepop July 22 2012, 07:44:47 UTC
Lol that ending. Perfect. XD It's nice to come across fic that fleshes out side characters that I didn't think I'd be interested in reading or knowing more about. You did an awesome job with it!

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OP justicepop August 14 2012, 03:31:55 UTC
I apologize for the lateness of this, but I've just come back to dig (ha) through this meme and what a joy it is to stumble upon one of my prompts filled! There's no need for you to apologize - it's true I had prompted for something on the wacky side, but what you wrote for me is even *better*. I actually really enjoy plausible, well thought-out back stories like this one~

That said, I think you did a great job fleshing out Mole's character! The salesman father wasn't something I would have thought of and yet it fit him perfectly~ I liked how very integrated his lifestyle was with dirt - the descriptions of the different kinds and his reactions to them were a nice touch, plus the instance where being covered in dirt all the time bolstered his immune system and saved him from the disease that took his parents was clever. I must admit that I was very amused by the idea of him not caring what everyone thought and burrowing nude towards the end - and when he met That and Whitmore! Pff priceless! And the little mention of Audrey's take on the story was the perfect way to wrap it up~ XD

Thank you so much for writing this for me! Not gonna lie - I kind of want to taste dirt now ahaha~

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