LUCY/SUSAN - KILL ME SOFTLY

[shyunpo]

Title: Kill Me Softly
Fandom/Pairing: NARNIA; Lucy Pevensie/Susan Pevensie
Summary: Susan doesn’t believe anymore and it’s breaking Lucy’s heart.

Comments

[elendraug]

...OUCH.

This is just. argh. AUGH. It's tense and painful to read; you can feel Lucy's desperation for Susan to believe her (it's almost a throwback to discovering the wardrobe). I really loved the turns of phrase you had in this, like "salt in her sight" and the like.

Very beautifully done. I'm glad I could help inspire it!

[taz34]

How painful for Lucy to go through this with Susan. You've done an incredible job in capturing the torment that Lucy feels when she would try to get her brothers and sister to believe her about the wardrobe and in seeing Aslan when they went back to Narnia the second time.

[kaiwynn]

oh god. owwww. you've broken my heart :(

and you know, i kind of like the subtle-shipping in this one. it's very nicely done ♥

[politelypuzzled]

THIS IS GRAND...OMG YOU COULD SO CONTINUE IT FROM SUSANS POV AFTER THE TRAIN WRECK THAT KILLS LU PETE AND ED

omg

omg'

omg

now that would be HELLA INTENSE!

lol

sorry im crazy

[cocomouse123]

o wow that was really emotional. susan (in the movie) was always one of my favorite characters because she's so strong. i really hope (for the movie) that they'll bring her back in the end, and not let her lose faith. thanks for such a touching story!